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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2003-06-18 03:40 AM

torn

they dip into dreams
digging up
the buried earth

it is all
     right there
                the fear
the doubt

we have built a funeral
      carefully constructed with
swelling dark and composed eyes

the talking when nobody listens
the grasping for sombody's vision
the angle
of the throat
joining with
the chin
and it's lonely bobbing
as it
strives to quench
the bile
with the swallowed
tears

we make a way
              so that the cellos
don't
roar us
     out of existence

we make a way

because that is

                             all
we

                         have

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2003-06-18 03:59 AM

awesome!

that
is
all
we
have

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

2 posted 2003-06-18 04:14 AM

smile
thank you Dixie

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2003-06-18 11:23 AM

sometimes, it is just that way.

sighing
M

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

4 posted 2003-06-18 11:59 AM

Yanno? You've got this thing down now.
You have got yerself a style of yer own.

And it works!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2003-06-18 12:01 PM

yes.

We do go on..sometimes for no better reason than it's all we have left to do..

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2003-06-18 06:55 PM

torn

they dip into dreams
digging up
the buried earth

it is all
     right there
                the fear
the doubt

we have built a funeral
      carefully constructed with
swelling dark and composed eyes

==============================

yes...you do have your own distinct and most unique style...and Ive noticed your titles are always very creative and poetically clever as are your images and personifications.
Well done poet sir.

No matter what the differences
No matter what the cost
When words become our weapons ...
All that's beautiful is lost.

DeVante'

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2003-07-15 03:31 AM

Well, I missed this when you first posted,
but I'm glad I found it tonight.

"we make a way
              so that the cellos
don't
roar us
     out of existence

we make a way

because that is

                             all
we

                         have"

Love this, Brian...beautifully said.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2003-07-15 09:59 AM

quote:
we make a way
              so that the cellos
don't
roar us
     out of existence

we make a way

because that is

                             all
we

                         have

Not only do you have your own style Brian, it appears you definitely have your own way of getting a point across and hitting it home so dang hard. This was a great poem.

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

9 posted 2003-07-15 10:02 AM

And the bass just keeps booming on.

Great style and thoughts.

Enjoyed

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

10 posted 2003-07-15 11:09 AM

they dip into dreams
digging up
the buried earth

it is all
right there
the fear
the doubt

~*~

Thank you, Brian.

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