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christian
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0 posted 06-16-2003 02:01 AM       View Profile for christian   Email christian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for christian


  ballpoint calligraphy

  ---------------------
  

  i hope your pen fails you--midway through sentences
  leaving broken analogies to taper off
  in bleached blanks, where your brilliance fades
  with clever catchphrases
  running off cold ink
  and the most insincere of all inspiration ..

  because this is nothing more than unprophetic.
  chickenscratch scriptures with      
  revisions seeping through scrabble metaphors        
  and kaleido-images, serving
  as just another playonwords
  brinking margins,
  and the avant garde you never were ..

  but perhaps, in this drab-monochromatic world
  where pens produce the poet and
  gaudy fonts feed the starving critic,
  your bravado slips off silver tongues
  as something beyond poetic.
  and you grace these lines--with the glory
  of un-nailed palms
        
  but i can see right past your roughdraft heroics ..
  nothing more than
  ballpoint calligraphy--at its finest.
  misleading green eyes
  and artless minds
  to believe in poetry
  that is imperfect enough, to slide as masterp e i ces


[This message has been edited by christian (06-16-2003 02:08 AM).]

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passing shadows
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1 posted 06-16-2003 02:07 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

damn! *sitting here in awe*
Aenimal
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2 posted 06-16-2003 02:19 AM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Jesus! I'm also at a loss for words..oh the venom of this..damn! I loved this
christian
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3 posted 06-16-2003 03:13 AM       View Profile for christian   Email christian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christian


i've made two people say damn--already. still
haven't contemplated if thats a good thing
or bad. ha.

thanks y'all.

--chris

[This message has been edited by christian (06-16-2003 05:31 PM).]

jellybeans
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4 posted 06-16-2003 02:15 PM       View Profile for jellybeans   Email jellybeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jellybeans

ok, I read you when you started, and knew you had potential....you have reached my expectations and surpassed them....this is incredible......*standing to applaud*

ps... I know my poetry is  'self' centered, but this very poem is why I cannot write one until I have lived it, and then obey the urge to make it come to life on paper with my pen...or so I hope this is what my poetry speaks...anyway...
great write!!
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5 posted 06-16-2003 02:20 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Fantastic write!!
So good to read you here today Chris.
You have indeed come a long way.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunshine
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Christian, I'm noting some growth here.  
Good job, young man...Very good.
BluesSerenade
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7 posted 06-16-2003 02:58 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Impressive work christian~
Love the cutting edge, and the way you let her rip!!!

We all go about things differently,
and you really took off on this, in a good way.

*applause*
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8 posted 06-16-2003 03:01 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

uh huh... honesty with a bite.. nicely done Christian.. got some grit in this one you did..

nice work.

christian
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9 posted 06-16-2003 05:29 PM       View Profile for christian   Email christian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christian


just for the record, this isn't targetting
the majority of writers here, or for that
matter, any true-form writer.

just from an experience i had to let
diffuse on paper. so,

excuse the unbridled, hulk-like
emotions. and, again, thanks for taking
the time to read it and dropping the
comments. i appreciate the feedback.

--chris.
christian
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10 posted 06-23-2003 02:38 AM       View Profile for christian   Email christian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christian


beans: potential, everybody has that. thats such
an over-the-counter compliment, but i think i'll
take it. thanks for making me smile. :smirk:

[This message has been edited by christian (06-23-2003 02:44 AM).]

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You do have potential, it gushes all over your words. How old are you? I can recall coming across a post where you said you were around 18 years old and if that's the case, your poetry is so mature for your age. Although this is more intense than your usual stuff with a little more spunk and teethgritting, I still enjoy it, as with all your other pieces.  I hope to read more from you, thanks for the inspiration!
Dark Angel
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12 posted 06-23-2003 03:50 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Ahhhhh it's so good to read you Christian, i've have my fix for the day but I need more from you darn it!

Brill iant  heh.

this is a

Maree
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Welp....I'm with Aenimal and Dixie on this one. "Damn"

I read it twice, then once again!

Wonderful write!
Artic Wind
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14 posted 03-30-2009 07:37 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

This is good poetry! ~ Excellent


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