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Rick
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0 posted 2003-06-15 08:02 AM



You can sit and brew your sorrow
Then lay and let it stir
But hinder will your morrow
When blessings may occur

You can cry a thousand teardrops
The treasures never find
Nurture all the sleeping crops
To help the weeping mind

But goodness needs a doorway
A place where it can start
To then deplete the inner pain
That strains the weary heart

So through the door to warmness
And on to where the pain
On to sharing what’s inside
And what good does remain

For sharing what is biting
The cord that plays the heart;
Turns each day more inviting
And a better place to start

And finding friends that care enough
To sit and give you care
Will turn that brew to happiness
And rid of what was there

     ...........

We ourselves are enemy
We fight our life within
Reluctant for the cure
To let the love back in

So open up your goodness
And let a few more share
Learn to share a little more
With all your friends out there

© Copyright 2003 Rick Van Weenen - All Rights Reserved
Patricia
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1 posted 2003-06-15 08:12 AM


We ourselves are enemy
We fight our life within
Reluctant for the cure
To let the love back in

Oh Rick, you are speaking to me, especially with this stanza.  I was just accused of this yesterday.  I am having a difficult time with this.  Rather than accepting love, I feel like bolting.  I fight it.  Oh, gosh, I didn't mean to bare my soul.  But you touched me with this.

On a more technical note...your meter was perfect, the flow excellent.

Great write!

Patricia

Nan
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2 posted 2003-06-15 08:42 AM


This is very good advice - and expressed so poetically, how could anyone read your words and not respond with a sharing friendly smile??...
Rick
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3 posted 2003-06-15 08:43 AM


Dear Patricia, thank you for this reply, I think that most of us are reluctant to let people in too easily, somehow we feel comfortable with our pain, living with the sorrow, somehow it shelters us from another painful experience.
I don't really know, guessing at a lot of what life dishes, just hope one day to have a wonderful main course.
Again thank you, your reply was much appreciated once again.
Take care my friend.

Sincerely
Rick

Rick
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4 posted 2003-06-15 08:46 AM


Dear Nan, great to see your reply here, thank you for the smile and your kind words, always great to share a little with you all.
Take care.

Sincerely
Rick

Kahlil
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5 posted 2003-06-15 11:54 AM


But goodness needs a doorway
A place where it can start
To then deplete the inner pain
That strains the weary heart

I have been thinking these very thoughts all morning and was astounded to see them here written just for me.  Thank you!

cynicsRus
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6 posted 2003-06-15 12:05 PM


Rick,
Nice to read poetry every now and then with such tight meter; rhymes carefully crafted.
Very well stated.
Thanks for sharing,

Sid

littlewing
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7 posted 2003-06-15 01:30 PM


Rick:

a beautiful sentiment indeed

I needed this today . . .

beautiful thoughts
xxoo

Midnitesun
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8 posted 2003-06-15 01:36 PM


I KNEW I'd enjoy this write from your kind pen. Happy Father's Day, Rick...at least that's what today is designated as in the USA.
G'Day, mate.

Rick
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9 posted 2003-06-16 08:19 AM


Kahlil, the pleasure was all mine, my friend, it is amazing how when you are in certain thought, you can find something that relates in almost the exact way. Thank you for your reply, much appreciated.

cynicsRus, Sid, thank you for your kind words here my friend and the heart filled comments which meant so much to me, hope we can chat again soon.

Hi littlewing, glad I could help out in some way today, thank you for your comments, very much appreciated.

Midnitesun, G'Day back to you, not father's day here yet, but not too far off, thank you for your sentiment and thank you so much for the beautiful comment you bestowed on me, very, very much appreciated.

To you all my friends, again thank you very much, I consider you all as my friends.

Sincerely
Rick

Suetang
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10 posted 2003-06-24 12:02 PM


Hello Rick

Your words always carry such a strong message and I am always inspired when reading your works of art.

"Love alone is capable
of uniting human beings
in such a way as to
complete and fulfil them,
for it alone takes them
and joins them by what
is deepest in themselves."

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

passing shadows
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11 posted 2003-06-24 04:40 AM


how inspiring! Rick, this is wonderful! Should be read every morning!
catalinamoon
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12 posted 2003-06-24 09:31 AM


Beautiful words, Rick. May we all learn from them.
Sandra

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13 posted 2003-06-24 02:14 PM


Rick, your writing is a beautiful expression of your beautiful self!

Words to live by!

Thanks for sharing the you of you!

Luvin' hugs,
Linda

LeeJ
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14 posted 2003-06-24 02:33 PM


Hi Rick...thank you for writing this poem...really hit home...as I am living proof...I don't want to let anyone in or close anymore...and I'm ok with that...yes, sometimes it does get lonely....but when it does...I think about those times when I was with someone...and there is nothing to compare that kind of lonliness, feeling of failure.  Awful...but your poem was very beautiful and leaves one to ponder....thank you
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15 posted 2003-06-24 03:01 PM


And finding friends that care enough
To sit and give you care
Will turn that brew to happiness
And rid of what was there


Thank you, dear Rick, for being one of those "friends that care enough", here at Passions. You are very sweet for writing these. Thank you for sharing your heart with us.  
Hugs,  
Ethel

nakdthoughts
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16 posted 2003-06-24 04:08 PM


And I guess that's why so many of us post here.
Thank you, Rick

M

Rick
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17 posted 2003-08-02 08:34 AM


Dear Sue, you are always so lovely with your replies, I enjoyed your write also, thank you.

Dear Dixie, once again thank you my friend, always good to see you here.

Dear Sandra, life is a learning curve, it is nice if some words make the difference. Thanks for the reply, much appreciated.

Dear Linda, I seem to find that feelings and inner thoughts are the inspirations that guide my pen, somehow it relieves so some things I can forget. Thanks for the reply, very much appreciated.

LeeJ, wonderful to read your reply and that it gives you something to ponder, may the lonliness not become to empty my friend, for I am finding that life is too short.

Dear Ethel, thank you for calling me a friend, my heart I share with you all, you are all so kind to sit and listen and be there.

Dear nakdthoughts, you are right, that is a big reason we are all here, to share and find a place where peace is offered for a while.

To you all my friends, again thank you for your replies and kindness, take care and be well.

Sincerely
Rick



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