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Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2003-06-14 06:41 PM

okay,now just to warn you before any of you continue to read...this poem i just written,it isnt edited yet,or spaced out just right. wanted to get some feed back before i edit it and archive it in my poems. thanks

hurt,is what i feel when i look into your eyes
when i see you my heart just crumbles and dies
pulsating up against my chest,like a train wreak
ready to begin. that is what i feel when i am close to
you. even though i still love you,that means nothing
to your mind. you just stroll on by and meet me when you
wanna past the time. still my heart and soul can't take
anymore of that so called love you want to give to me.
all i want to do anymore is just be by myself,just want
to go back to being me. you don't make that it that easy
for me to go back in time,to a place i was once before you
cast my love aside. everytime i try to keep away from you
you just keep invading my mind. when i sleep it is you that i see
when i am awake it is you that captures my thoughts. i just want
a break, but for the sake of my heart
please just let me be and don't stop when you finally do make up your mind
think of my heart and what you done to me the last time....

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2003-06-14 08:17 PM

I know how this is...very understandable

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-06-14 08:45 PM

dang foxy . . .

know this one too

I think you got it fine

space it up and print

nice writing - powerful
xxoo

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

3 posted 2003-06-14 09:40 PM

I can relate to this one! Great write here.

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-06-14 10:06 PM

good write format it!!!

QjQ

garysgirl