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gyiel marlok
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 145
OHIO

0 posted 2003-06-14 04:21 PM


i shed a tear for the human race
i shed a tear for those who place last
we require all the foolish taste
tombstone shimmer for those in the past
quit discussing argumentive flakes
crutches for bull---- walking in the looking glass
speed up the peoples pace...tension mounts.. i see your face laughs
amazing rights..disgusting grace..it's all we've known...
    we've been walking all the narrow way..
     and below us is the fate
  keep it coming..relax we won't pass
  crap i've been drinking out my flask..
a pictures taken i see the flash...
developing all the wrath...
keep running we can't hide...
i think we've jumped from truth to lie
conclusion to the puzzles missing piece
our deceased will cease..
foolish statements make them keep their pride
look in the light, it will not hurt your eyes

     i walk the line,i've seen your face
      i'd stop to talk..but time won't wait..
i've braced the backs and lost the weight..
   we keep forgetting the buds won't taste...
     the narrow way
     the narrow way


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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
1 posted 2003-06-14 04:26 PM


very nice,i enjoyed it.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


Magnus
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2 posted 2003-06-14 11:08 PM


Interesting.  and has a rap feel to it when
reading the lines..  

gyiel marlok
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 145
OHIO
3 posted 2003-06-15 12:16 PM


this will be my last post, thank you very much,my band is starting to take off,and i don't have much time to do this and my job,i really just wanted to see if anyone really would pay attention to my words,and my theory was correct,so goodbye people,they fear what they don't understand,so they recluse from it
passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2003-06-15 12:40 PM


nice to have you here for awhile, good luck with your band and your life
QjQ
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since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756
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5 posted 2003-06-15 12:44 PM


nice write,, and good luck on your venture...

QjQ

Artic Wind
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6 posted 2008-02-02 02:09 PM


Enjoyed....

ARCTIC WIND

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