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QjQ
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0 posted 2003-06-14 03:23 PM


Summer Breezes


the soft summer breezes
serenade
through the boughs

as we lay on the soft
grass staring up
at  
shades of blu

white clouds of fluff  lazily
drift  across our
vision

we gaze deeply into each
others eyes
with loving thoughts

longing for




QjQ

[This message has been edited by QjQ (06-14-2003 04:33 PM).]

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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2003-06-14 03:25 PM


Love with a soft, sensual touch...

Love & Light,
EA

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2003-06-14 03:29 PM


QjQ
Enjoyed the read.

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-06-14 07:24 PM


Glenn, this is pretty.
I enjoyed reading it.  
Hugs  
Ethel

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4 posted 2003-06-14 08:13 PM


very pretty
Saunni
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5 posted 2003-06-14 09:10 PM


This is an awesome picture I love it!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

JilGirl
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6 posted 2003-06-15 12:52 PM


Lovely, romantic picture!

Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands.

daniel_martin
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7 posted 2003-06-15 12:59 PM


a neat, romantic tone which is complimented by the slow flow of the poem.

i like it, but for:

"white clouds of fluff"

i don't like fluff, its a weak description, part metaphor, partly not.

daniel

QjQ
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8 posted 2003-06-16 03:24 AM


thanks every one for your reply's


:) QjQ ;)

QjQ
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9 posted 2003-06-16 03:25 AM


thanks every one for your reply's
Kahlil
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10 posted 2003-07-01 09:34 PM


I like this QjQ, it is a timeless snapshot away from the rat race to a nice, real place we'd all like to be, esp with a lover.  

I don't know, Daniel Martin, I like the white clouds of fluff, that's what makes them float and stuff...

Magnus
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11 posted 2003-07-01 09:42 PM


Glenn, while you two are lying there,  how
about plucking just one four leaf clover
for me??  

You painted a very enjoyable picture..

Margherita
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12 posted 2003-07-02 08:58 AM


A vision of sweetness!
So lovely.
Love, Margherita

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