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RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08
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0 posted 2003-06-14 06:24 AM


just a short mess around with words that i was working with seeing what i could create in this mind of mine its not really that good but its ok everything needs work could call this the beginning of what would be a great poem if i reached the end
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This is the new beginning of life
As I enter the world I long to hide
Facing fears I hold deep down inside

Once my fears are banished from the world
May I walk in peace along the roads
And Into that light I wish I could hold

At last my dreams mix with my reality
Merging my worlds forming the one
And the fears I hold turn into dust
Now I can walk into the light of love


© Copyright 2003 Lee Hepworth - All Rights Reserved
Patricia
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since 2003-04-06
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1 posted 2003-06-14 07:31 AM


At last my dreams mix with my reality
Merging my worlds forming the one
And the fears I hold turn into dust
Now I can walk into the light of love

Well, all right.  Your fooling around with words produced a very nice verse.  What is even better?  It speaks to me this morning.  I really like this...the dreams of love (which I oft write) and the reality of love (which I don't oft write) because the dreams (or musings) are so much better!!! Perhaps a merge of the two, as you say, will result in a stroll in the love's light.  I shall give it a try!

Much enjoyed.

Patricia

RedStoneEB
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2 posted 2003-06-14 07:34 AM


Patricia

Glad you liked my little mess around and im sure if you mix dreams with the real world the light of love will shine on you

check out my other poems i took more care in them lol

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2003-06-14 02:32 PM


good good good! keep messin' around
gyiel marlok
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4 posted 2003-06-14 02:51 PM


PRETTY COOL
RedStoneEB
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uk
5 posted 2003-06-14 03:28 PM


lol are you the CAPS LOCK GIRL

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
6 posted 2003-06-14 04:15 PM


nice little mess of words
you have here Red lol

you will find that light . . .
keep walking the path
xxoo

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla
7 posted 2003-06-14 04:22 PM


very nice

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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8 posted 2008-02-02 11:58 AM


Very Nice indeed

ARCTIC WIND

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