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Making Plans Under The Velvet Skies......(11 of my Japanese Verses)
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Making Plans Under The Velvet Skies......(11 of my Japanese Verses) |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA 
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 Photo From Webshots ~*~*~ The stars are shining brightly in the velvet skies whispering softly Walking hand in hand by the soft light of the moon on the beach at night With feet in the sand we lie down on the blanket while watching the stars While we watch the stars we dream and talk of our lives hearing the soft waves Planning our future lying under sparkling stars in black velvet skies Lying side by side on the white sand of the beach we spoke of our dreams We were there all night with sun rising o'er water the daybreak came forth Sun shining brightly with reflections of color on clear blue waters The suns rays shine forth sending down feelings of warmth on to the white sands Sea shells on the sand with the sound clearly inside whispering softly Softly in our ears we hear sweet sounds of our dreams and plans we have made ~*~*~ (These are eleven of the Japanese verses that I wrote all combined. I thought it was a little different. Maybe one day I will know exactly all the technical differences between a "haiku" and a "senryu". I love those little verses, don't you all? They are really fun to try to write.) This is a repost from Open 23 [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-15-2003 10:48 AM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice short verses,, i enjoyed very much,, i like to do short poems all so,,5--7--5  QjQ [This message has been edited by QjQ (06-14-2003 12:59 AM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Oh i remember these! its so wonderful to see them all put together like this, cos i dont think i ever did? did you just keep them seperate before? but now its like the final masterpiece...so, another one of yours is going into my library Ethel Mae....do love the colours you used, it suits it! p.s, thankyou, i will have a wonderful time i'm sure, and yes 'mum' i will 'be careful' lol. your concern is soooo sweet! much love as always, gem xxxx  |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
here's my excuse..i'm not fully awake yet, its 9am here, and i forgot to actually add it to my library. duuuuh. lol  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful! just gorgeous! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yeah, Glenn, they really are fun to write, aren't they? But, I do still love to write the rictameters better. LOL  Hugs,  Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Gemma, yeah, I did put them all together in Open 23. They are fun to write. Thanks for the compliments on them. I'm glad that you like them and are putting them into your library. That makes me feel good for someone to keep my poems. I really appreciate it. And, you'd better listen to your "mum", Little Lady, and be real careful. Do have a good time, though...I know you will!! See you when you get back, sweet Gemma. Hugs Ethel Mae |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Dixie. I always appreciate your replies. Hugs Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-14-2003 10:07 AM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
beautiful sentiments Ethel |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Ethel...Marvelous work!!!! Everything so wonderfully connected and beautiful. The theme of love woven in each verse in a hundred different ways. ***Ivy Rose |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A lovely compilation! Very enjoyable read! Have a glorious day, dear poetess!  Huggums, Linda |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely...James |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ethel: this beautiful - can you elaborate on the verses a bit more - how different are they from the haiku or senyru? amazing you . . . xxoo |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
wow, that was beautifull, truly amazing thank you for your comment on my first poem on here |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Sea shells on the sand with the sound clearly inside whispering softly my favorite snippet here............ just got in from the blessed nj shore, lovely day |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ethel, this is beautiful, sweet friend, yay, I remember all your gorgeous haikus and senryus and they fit so beautifully together! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, thank you, kind Sir. I'm really glad that you liked it. . Ivy Rose, thank you for the compliments! I really do appreciate them. I'm glad that you liked them. . Linda, thank you sweet Lady, for liking them. And, I hope that you have a wonderful day, too. . James, thank you very much. I'm glad that you liked them. . . Hugs to all of you Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue, I'm glad that you liked them. Thank you. And, these are some of both kinds of the verses, from what I understand. They are both three lines with syllable count..... 1st line....5 syllables 2nd line....7, and 3rd line....5 syllables The haiku is about nature, and the senryu is something about feelings, but I can't remember just what. That's why I just call them "Japanese Verses". LOL I need to study them more, because I really enjoy doing them...just not as much as the rictameters. LOL I'm glad that you liked them. Thank you. Hugs Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
exhale, thank you very much. I'm really glad that you liked them. And, you're welcome about the reply. I hope you're enjoying yourself here. This is really a nice place, isn't it? :heartZ: . Michelle, that sounds like a really fun day! I love the beach. And, aren't the sea shells pretty? All special in their own unique way....just like poets and poetry are. Thanks for replying to my little verses. . Noah, I'm so glad that you liked them. Yeah, I really had fun writing all these. I'll have to write more soon. I've kind of got hooked on the rictameters, it seems, though. LOL . . Hugs to each and every one of you Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Enjoyed these very much Ethel Maree |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes, different, and very good to read.... ....but AAUGH!...that pastel typeface that I have to use "Select" on before I can read it! Have mercy on these ancient eyeballs! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maree, thank you very much. I appreciate it. . Hey Ed, thanks. Oh, and I changed the pastel to a darker orchid. Can you read it better? I hope so! . . Hugs to you both Ethel |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Very Beautiful!  ARCTIC WIND |
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