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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-06-13 07:27 PM



Like the splitting ends
of my own hair
you have worn me
and coloured me countless moods.

I forgive you
over the greying time
that lays inches thick
since you last saw me.

Shall it be this then
that causes me to tear you
from my roots
and rid you out of my head?

[This message has been edited by gemjop (06-13-2003 07:47 PM).]

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icebox
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in the shadows
1 posted 2003-06-13 07:37 PM


Good Head is hard to write, and this is perfect.
Patricia
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2 posted 2003-06-13 09:04 PM


Nice 'n Easy, my friend, no man is worth all of that!  Don't rip out your hair.  It's so pretty...as we both have about the same color.

Patricia

Aenimal
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3 posted 2003-06-13 11:06 PM


You had me with the title though my expectation was completely off base grins..um..anyway I was still taken by your words as I always am
exhale
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4 posted 2003-06-13 11:17 PM


that was incredible and your choice of wording was awesome, i loved it
the_loner_23
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5 posted 2003-06-13 11:18 PM


I really enjoyed this. Veyr interesting write.

Cold hands means a warm heart

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-06-14 05:08 AM


awesome write! love it!
Goldenrose
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7 posted 2003-06-14 06:25 AM


nice. i like the title.

Goldenrose.


RedStoneEB
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8 posted 2003-06-14 07:06 AM


Nice i like the title (well what male wouldnt lol)

then  you open it find its about hair not the other thing

lol anyway nice read me bad lol

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

gemjop
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9 posted 2003-06-14 07:21 AM


he he...*thinks about changing the title as not to lead to dissapointment*
one day, if my muse really leaves me, i may write about , you know, but til then, i'll carry on being innocent.

thankyou for your replies, you all make me smile.

lol at patricia's reply, nice n easy, oooh you should see my roots, not good, not good, i need some. hair dye that is.


much love, gem xxx

garysgirl
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10 posted 2003-06-14 10:25 AM


Shall it be this then
that causes me to tear you
from my roots
and rid you out of my head?


Sometimes we wish it was that easy, don't we?  LOL
Hugs to, sweet Gemma  
Ethel Mae
(Pssttt!!! By the way, you have to be careful of what you say around here, sometimes.  LOL It gets took the wrong way lots of times. LOL)

LngJhnAg
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11 posted 2003-06-14 10:30 AM


Oh oh, it looks like Miss Clairol has a new line - Mr. Clairol, and that ain't good.  lol

We men do have a tendency to be a bit, shall I say, capricious with our talents to stroke softly.  It's really not our fault, yanno.  If women were more like men, we'd all be weird, and then it wouldn't make any difference.  See?  I've given some words of wisdom.

littlewing
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12 posted 2003-06-14 11:33 AM


gemma - ooh I have to be careful what I say now _ I am a mod here - ahaha that is funny -
anyhow - these "men" grrrrr . . .

shutting mouth now . . .

To bring this subject in such a matter
as greying roots- just amazes me
you amaze me - would never have thought
of using this take on it
brilliant
xxoo  

QjQ
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13 posted 2003-06-14 12:21 PM


very nice write,,   enjoyed...

QjQ

inkedgoddess
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14 posted 2003-06-14 04:40 PM


back to the head of the class up
u go
its a bad hair day in nj, cant do a thing with it in this humidity,
inches of roots, know the feeling right now, need to recharge again

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15 posted 2003-06-14 06:21 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Maybe the better alternative is to simply grow that hair out and let it cover that thought like a pompadour; you never know when those past visions might come necessary to interpret! (sad sigh) This is very powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Gemma, thank you for sharing!



May love and light awlays shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Artic Wind
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16 posted 2008-02-02 12:51 PM


Make sure you don't hurt your head lol



ARCTIC WIND

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