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Patricia
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0 posted 2003-06-13 06:56 PM


Sorceress

I curse she, the sorceress of my mind
The tricks she plays in poet’s rhyme
The tales she weaves in silken verse
Of maiden’s love and widow’s curse

Though not as simple at first it seems
She not awake me in metered dreams
Neither incantation nor witch’s spell
But ignites desire which burns as hell
A fire my wand oft refuses to tame
An inferno sparked by muse of flame
And so I ride furious the up and down
Flying upon broomstick as her clown

I point finger at my shameful accuse
The meandering sorceress of my muse
Then in mocking voice, I hear her say
It is your wand I am compelled to obey
And in relaxed recline and poet’s still
Commanded words shall appear at will



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1 posted 2003-06-13 06:58 PM


well done!
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2 posted 2003-06-13 06:59 PM


(smiling) I would trade my muse and her demands on days for one that was less demanding...

Nicely done... good meter and rhyme work... stuff I struggle to do myself...and if the world waited for me to write like this, they would wait for many a day between posts..
Oh..yeah that might not be such a bad thing... lol

I enjoyed!

Enchantress
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3 posted 2003-06-13 07:19 PM


Beautifully done and much enjoyed!
Of course the title had me from the get go.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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4 posted 2003-06-13 07:25 PM


Methinks you've got a bit of witch in you, too.

'Tis both a chant and a lament you have written here.

VERY nicely done, so sayeth the witch herself!

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5 posted 2003-06-13 07:32 PM




       ~~nmaste~~

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6 posted 2003-06-13 07:59 PM



Thy sorceress will wield her charm
thus allowing thy pen, swift disarm
all those poets who speak at will
as you will calm, and then shall still
thy wagging tongues, this poet's curse
as rhythm will roll, come rhyme, in verse...

and all who shall not dance with you
will someday view their life with rue

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-13-2003 08:00 PM).]

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RedStoneEB
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8 posted 2003-06-14 07:14 AM


enjoyed...RedStoneEB

actually i liked reading it hopefully you will replie to some of my works with your thoughts

i really enjoed the read thanks for sharing

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

Ericc
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9 posted 2003-06-15 03:58 PM


Beautiful!
Eric

MikeFessel
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10 posted 2003-06-16 10:45 PM


Patricia,

"Neither incantation nor witch’s spell
But ignites desire which burns as hell
A fire my wand oft refuses to tame
An inferno sparked by muse of flame

I point finger at my shameful accuse
The meandering sorceress of my muse
Then in mocking voice, I hear her say
It is your wand I am compelled to obey
And in relaxed recline and poet’s still
Commanded words shall appear at will"

These are incredible lines. You have really mastered your muse in my opinion here Ha ha this is the darkest expression I have ever seen you use. I am listening to Iced Earth right now and you are giving them a run for their money LOL I LOVED this!

          Mike

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11 posted 2008-02-06 05:54 PM


Love it!

ARCTIC WIND

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