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Across Lanes
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Across Lanes |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Across Lanes a glance in another lane her eyes smile fingers lift a fraction off the wheel and then the ramp destination not my own this fractal contact maybe last unless by chance the chance my eyes hands pull me cross lanes! cross lanes! follow follow her lead and take her destination take her and the ramp passed past she’s gone |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nicely written,,, QjQ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like youve got the male version of the scenarios that play in my head on any given day |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
really good writing here Ed - loved the rhythm - Paul |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Ed..much enjoyed the read... Sorry she got away on ya!  ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes, oh inked one.... and especially titillating since this particular driver was somebody I know......(!) ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome poem as usually. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
.......and who said she got away......? ....but she did. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
......for now..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling).. for now? Very nicely done Ed... the flow and form match the thoughts tempo.... as for the idea.. ( sigh) reminds me of a time..and she too got away.. lol |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
*s..reminds me to smile at the next driver who crosses my lane. with a little luck~~~ who knows??? M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
ROFL... The poem is so incredibly poignant and moving... and then you pipe in with your responses and I get the giggles. LOL No fair! *G* I was working up to a good cry... and maybe they'd let me leave work early? *G* But that's okay... staying here just gives me the opportunity to read again. *S* This is beautiful! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Anybody ever tell ya yer good at this "sexual tension" stuff? Well done, m'friend. battin' eyelashes and smiling here.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Tell.....? It's more fun being shown.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The poem is awesome... the thread is pure delight. *G* And it IS sen's birthday... *evil grin* LOL [This message has been edited by suthern (06-13-2003 04:53 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....ah, good chance for the master to practice..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Interesting poem R'leader... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yep, and those little situations are interesting when they come, when you say to yourself, "What if I just did, burned all my delta-vee and went into a different orbit -- what would really happen then....?" Those things do happen.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I like this very much Ed.  Maree. |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
I loved this one - for life is full of such 'fractal' moments; too quick; too fleeting for the logical mind to assess...where the pure emotion and impulse take over the steering wheel of the timeslice... However, one must always watch out for the concrete barriers..... Great write. CG |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
oh yes, ratman they happen, yes they do |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yeah, CG....a fractal being a pattern that is repeated at every level from macro to micro..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...too often we let go of something because it hits so quickly that the rational mind doesn't have a chance to make a decision. I've found spontaneous happenings to be among the most rewarding...without them there would be no serendipity. Loved this...can picture it so clearly. [This message has been edited by Martie (06-13-2003 08:53 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful write...loved the entire thread! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
smiling....ah you never fail to suprise me with your writes. next time you see her, change lanes dammit! and then tell us what happens |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . and I was starting to feel all sorry for you . . . lol loved this write Ed xxoo |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Just too slow that time, Ed.... but there's always a next time, you big flirt, you.  |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Simply awesome, Ratleader. I believe this is the first I have read of yours but this is a true GEM! I love it! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed your Piece!  ARCTIC WIND |
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