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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-06-13 11:15 AM


We have for days now
Been climbing these mountains
And the colder nights have made us trade
The soft cotton for wool.

At the beginning you enjoyed the respite
From our desert heat but I see now
You shiver and frown deeper lines
Into your forehead with each day.
I have insisted you wear one of my own robes
Over your and while it has warmed you a bit
I have seen the suffer in your face.

Last night you talked to me about melons
And how you wanted to enjoy them in the heat
And that wearing so many clothes as this
Suited you not in our tented bed
For you could not sleep in feel
Of my heart beat and my hands could not
Lay on your back without the layers of cloth between
And you needed to feel our skin touch to tell you
We were alive and real.

It was
You said
As if I was not

My love
We will this day cross the pass
And begin to descend to the warmer air we both love.
There we will again pitch our tent of silk
And lie inside, listening to the rustle of it
In the evening wind while feasting on the delights
Of our love.

There will be plates of melon for you
That I will cut into chunks
So that I might touch them to your lips
And feed you the sweetness of life
While I taste the nectar of you.

We will spend a few days in rest
And re-introduce our flesh to the sun
And to each others…

Steady on my heart
And take my hand
We are almost
There.


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Edder
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1 posted 2003-06-13 11:19 AM


ok, what does one have to do to find inspiration such as this? amazing
Martie
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2 posted 2003-06-13 11:25 AM


Steady on my heart
And take my hand
We are almost
There.

Very touching, Ron

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3 posted 2003-06-13 11:28 AM


It was
You said
As if I was not

~*~

I think my heart stopped here...

it portends...
a feeling yet to come...

Your muse...
please thank your muse
for all of us.

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-06-13 11:29 AM


Screw inspiration, where the heck is a man like that?????


Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2003-06-13 01:06 PM


This got lost way too fast.


Patricia
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6 posted 2003-06-13 01:14 PM


During these moments with your words,  I escape this world and fall into the one you create. Not wanting to exit my escape, I read over and over again the words as I await...await your next pen.  

Sorry, Ron, choking back a few tears here.

Patricia

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7 posted 2003-06-13 01:17 PM


I could actually hear
the flutter of the silk tent..
in the dark,
and the flavour of the melon..on my lips.
Ooh...yes, please, thank your muse for us.

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8 posted 2003-06-13 01:41 PM


very powerful write
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9 posted 2003-06-17 08:46 PM


They just got there!!!  lmao   Moving right along...
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10 posted 2003-06-18 12:16 PM


For you could not sleep in feel
Of my heart beat and my hands could not
Lay on your back without the layers of cloth between
And you needed to feel our skin touch to tell you
We were alive and real.

It was
You said
As if I was not

These lines are for absorbing again and again. *S* You do write love so well, Cap'n... this is even more poignant since I read out of sequence and know the ending. *S*

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Gaia
11 posted 2003-06-18 02:49 PM



you devil you! how did you know I was dreaming of silk and honeydew last night during a fierce thunderstorm?
and I'm allergic to wool, anyway

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12 posted 2003-06-18 03:13 PM


Golly, Ron, you just get better and better, and these vignettes of yours simply shine.

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13 posted 2003-06-18 07:08 PM


nice
Artic Wind
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14 posted 2008-02-22 08:52 PM


This is very wonderful!

ARCTIC WIND

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