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The Relative Security Of Insignificance
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The Relative Security Of Insignificance |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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Walking blinded by the sun, undone and left behind, theoretically I'm real although I doubt it; yet I walk a'windward on, beyond the living dunes and gone, I want to touch the peace not destroy it. Jaggedly confronting me, an arm of broken ebony sprawls silently, saluting no soul's name; a manmade monolith, but free, it quietly denies the sea is slowly draining energy and life from it. Tireless crescendos! Pound the rocks! They can no more stop you than can I. Still I walk a'windward on beyond the living dunes, and gone, I only sense the majesty not keep it. What power brings these waves to crest? At best I only feel it never know it; I face the sea and openly it challenges my right to be, although from where I stand it can not touch me. Walking blinded by the sun, undone and left behind, self-consciously I'm frightened but deny it. So I walk a'windward on beyond the living dunes, and gone in search of honesty, forced to steal it. ©2003 by icebox |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"I want to touch the peace not destroy it." "What power brings these waves to crest? At best I only feel it never know it; I face the sea and openly it challenges my right to be, although from where I stand it can not touch me." "Walking blinded by the sun, undone and left behind, self-consciously I'm frightened but deny it." how you write of me and do not even know it...h |
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Canon_D_111 Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 58New York USA |
forced to steal it.... love it... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think I just had an epiphany! A shrink once told me that I feared success. OOOHHHHH... A decade later? I finally get it. Thank you!  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox "So I walk a'windward on beyond the living dunes, and gone in search of honesty, forced to steal it." The honesty in this poem is what grabs the heart and touches something felt by many. That is what makes a poem not just good, but great! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write! very powerful! yes! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Jaggedly confronting me, an arm of broken ebony sprawls silently, saluting no soul's name; a manmade monolith, but free, it quietly denies the sea is slowly draining energy and life from it. quiet denial... something I understand too well... enjoyed this Mr Ice... enjoyed it a great deal. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
hmmmmmmm....so yummy. Susan |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
Fascinating read. I'm sure I'll be thinking of this the next time I'm on a beach. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Jaggedly confronting me, an arm of broken ebony sprawls silently, saluting no soul's name; a manmade monolith, but free, it quietly denies the sea is slowly draining energy and life from it. *** that part hit me right between the eyes |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
IceBox~ 'I want to touch the peace'~ There is a quiet that touches the senses throughout this read~ Greatly enjoyed~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
icebox, Great read. Into the face of adversity , we stare, and do not blink, nor waver from our chosen course, and so, shall prevail, not by changing it's nature, but indeed, by changing ours'. Doc |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write!! Very much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
1slick_lady ~ I swea' ta god, I have not been peeking!!! *grin* I am glad you did not find it too intrusive. Thank you for you time in reading and for your comments. Cannon_D_111 ~ I am glad. Thank you. serenity blaze ~ Uh-huh, hmmm, yes I see...and how did you feel when you had this epiphany? Oops! Well, our time is up for this week; be sure to arrange payment on the way out. Remember, my standard office charge is $185.00 for a 45 minute hour. Same time next week? *smile* I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for your comments. the _loner_23 ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. Martie ~ You are very kind my friend. Thank you for taking time to read this poem and to comment. passing shadows ~ I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you. Cpat Hair ~ Oh yes, quiet denial, I too know it well; it is one click above quiet desperation. Thank you for your comment. Susan Caldwell ~ For some reason, your comment gave me a shiver! *laugh* Eromyna ~ That would be nice, thank you. Perhaps then you will share your thoughts with us all? Than you for reading my poem and for your comment. Midnitesun ~ Oh, I hope that it did not hurt! Thank you for sharing your comment. Marge Tindal ~ When I am on an empty North Atlantic beach, I often get a feeling that does not fit into words, and one which I have felt no where else. The ocean is to me more mother than any person I ever knew. Thank you for you time and comments. Dr.Moose1 ~ It is true that the ocean is one of those parts of existence which will not change to meet our needs; we must adapt to it. Thank you for reading my poem and for your comments. Enchantress ~ Thank you Ma'am; I am glad you enjoyed it. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
You are, without a doubt, the best poet I've read in this forum to date. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Local Rebel ~ Thank you for your very generous compliment. I think you will find many poets here with extraordinary talents which go far beyond my own. I have read many poems here which have made me realize that I may get to "that" level of skill and insight in a couple of lifetimes...if I am fortunate. Thanks again. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I live miles away from the sea and yet it touches me - and now yet another poem to add to my collection. Your words need to touch many more people than are here. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The master of metaphor... indeed... |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Honesty...steal it? I have pondered this...rid youself of doubt and denial then honesty is apparent. To face yourself head on? To live in truth of one's self, I don't know, Ice, if I can do this. It is more comfortable to stay here in this place. This is the way I took this piece. You know I go off on my own with your words. But that's why I like you. Patricia |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ice: this is awesome! self-consciously I'm frightened but deny it. yea - I know . . . xxoo |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Oh yes, there are many marvelous poets here. And if you'll look over in the corner you'll see I've been perusing around the blue boards for nigh on 4 years. Don't misunderstand. There are poets here who have written better works than some of your works -- but -- I'm not going to get into a critical analysis here. There are many who post in other forums that are, in my estimation, equal if not better -- we all write some bad ones and some good ones... and for some reason they still let me hang around too! You have a unique grasp of irony. That's innate -- not learned. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"What power brings these waves to crest? At best I only feel it never know it; I face the sea and openly it challenges my right to be, although from where I stand it can not touch me." Very nice, Ice |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Ice, You have certainly been on more beaches than I, but I recognize this power, and the allure of living dunes and such. And "stealing honesty"? If you recognize it well enough to steal it . . . and keep a little piece snug in your pocket. Well done verse, Sir. Much enjoyed. Wish I could do as well. Kraw' |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Poem! ARCTIC WIND |
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