navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #27 » Inability to Look Past
Open Poetry #27
Post A Reply Post New Topic Inability to Look Past Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
LastMoments
Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92


0 posted 2003-06-12 07:32 PM


Look at the way
You sheltered me in
Scarred by insecurity
Of everything you made in me
I'm listening to my heart
But it's black and blue
I'd listen to my thoughts
But they're all about you

Chorus
You were my first
And you're always around
In the walls of my mind
Condemned for my thoughts
You're always around
I needed you there
I need you now
You're what made me
You're the memory inside
You're what I can't forget
End Chorus

It was about the first chance
I couldn't let go
I opened my eyes
To see what I lost
You crippled my mind
Now I'm forced to restrain
And rather then heal
I met head on with pain

Chorus
You were my first
And you're always around
In the walls of my mind
Condemned for my thoughts
You're always around
I needed you there
I need you now
You're what made me
You're the memory inside
You're what I can't forget
End Chorus


You taught me to care
And then you left me alone
My heart is torn, no longer shut sewn
You ripped out my heart, the piece you had made
You took away
All you made in me

Every time I see
I see you there
You're beyond my touch
You're without a care
I wanted to say
You're what I miss
But I miss my loss
That's still lost in you

Chorus
You were my first
And you're always around
In the walls of my mind
Condemned for my thoughts
You're always around
I needed you there
I need you now
You're what made me
You're the memory inside
You're what I can't forget
End Chorus


I miss, I crave
But all remains in its place

© Copyright 2003 LastMoments - All Rights Reserved
Nightshade
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962
just out of reach
1 posted 2003-06-12 07:41 PM


Very nice! I would love to hear this put to music. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Midnitesun
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647
Gaia
2 posted 2003-06-12 07:52 PM


some good potential here, but it does start to bog down a bit when it gets to this point:
***
You taught me to care
And then you left me alone
My heart is torn, no longer shut sewn
You ripped out my heart, the piece you had made
You took away
All you made in me
***

I enjoyed the song.


passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
3 posted 2003-06-13 05:00 AM


love this
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2008-01-31 11:16 PM


Music to the ears! lol

ARCTIC WIND

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #27 » Inability to Look Past

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary