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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-06-12 03:21 PM


Veil lifted
I see torment fly
to its death.

How beautiful
its end
more pleasure than stars.

Sleeping in numbers
counting the clouds
never suited me.

Though it waves
proposing return
striking a deal with future.

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RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 772
uk
1 posted 2003-06-12 03:28 PM


liked the read nice poem

hey if you want we can become freinds well upto you of course my poems are in here somewhere lol just got to look lol

thanks for the nice read anyway

RedStoneEB

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
2 posted 2003-06-12 04:04 PM


A beautiful dream this. I hope you've achieved it gem
brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
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usa
3 posted 2003-06-12 04:07 PM


more pleasure than stars...

liked this

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2003-06-12 04:37 PM


Sleeping in numbers
counting the clouds
never suited me.


(smiling)... sleeping in numbers... an interesting phrase that reminded me of a dream I once had... and sleeping in numbers, while strange, was not so bad in my dream...

enjoyed this Gem...

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
5 posted 2003-06-12 05:16 PM


grinning at rons reply.

thankyou all, for replying, each one means a lot.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
6 posted 2003-06-13 03:18 AM


Gemma - liking this side of you
so inspiring - and keep those eyes
wide open missy please
you do deserve this "dream"
xxoo

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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7 posted 2003-06-13 03:21 AM


I see torment fly
to its death.

How beautiful
its end
more pleasure than stars.


I reaLLY love these lines!

Maree

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
8 posted 2003-06-13 03:34 AM


another awesome write~
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
9 posted 2008-01-31 10:46 PM


Interesting Write!

Very Descriptive

ARCTIC WIND

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