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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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The trees are drunk with rain. Their coats are woven as hearts of clouds breakdown. They wear the badge of martyrdom and stand immersed in tears; their shoulders weeping over as the changes come around. Colored pencils, writings on the sky, they've numbed to the deluge upon them. From this window seat, they bear the pain in thoughts sent off this rainsoaked day. With endless drops of broken dreams, their arms will still embrace me. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (06-12-2003 05:11 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful...James |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Lovely thoughts...the trees bear the pain and cry the tears. We have had so much rain here of late. It appears it will come again today. I will think of your lovely verse when it comes and feel the sun's ray. Thank you, Patricia |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The trees are drunk with rain. an interesting line... I kept wanting to read the trees are drunk ON rain...lol... you paint an image here...touched in a sadness but not without redemption.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
inkedgoddess - lovely sad write longing for embracing arms. You write well of your feelings... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Down times during gray, rainy days, can sometimes have a restorative effect on us. Although we may be feeling sad and lonely, there is something quite calming on those days. They also help to make the bright days appear even brighter. Your descriptive writing vividly captured the gray mood. Warm hugs, EA |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
Coming from a land where it barely ceases to rain (apart from today oddly enough) I usually scorn poems glamourising the tears of the sky, however your's truly touched me, i'll never criticise the British weather again...well...until I get caught in it. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice thought here  vandana |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
You can make even rain beautiful..still enough is enough this summer never comes |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
do the trees symbolize something,please tell me, i like this |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
rain drops....tears from the sky. tears....rain from our hearts. I like your stuff sweetie! |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very good visions expressed,,,, QjQ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a creative mind you have Michele! Love the mood! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is great.....I love the picture you painted!!!! The title caught my attention too!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Michele: of course they will . . . colored pencils - my my - you never cease to amaze me *shaking head here* xxoo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Beautiful Michele..I watch my trees soaked and bending...but the sun is shining for a moment or two today, lifting them slightly. M |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for glimpsing into my little world |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 taking another look |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Colored pencils, writings on the sky, --------------- that is one of the coolest personifications and metaphors for a tree Ive ever read... very very cool write.. I have a thing for trees so I loved this. No matter what the differences |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You write my thoughts sometimes...much better than I can express them. Enjoyed. TD |
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topsyturveychick Member
since 2003-01-19
Posts 57Bris,QLD,Aus |
The trees are drunk with rain. That in it's self is a great line. Awesome I asked God how much he loved me... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michelle, I don't know how I've missed this. These are beautiful thoughts. I enjoyed reading.   Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-17-2003 11:00 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Just wanted to read this again We are here to laugh at the odds and live our lives so well that Death will tremble to take us. ~ Charles Bukowski |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks and guess what raffi, i think i finally am going on to a second page now, and i can thank u............. well let me see, |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
no, i guess not  okay , for those that have been there, done that........ how many replies before you roll over on to page 2,,,,,,,,,i have to do it once in this lifetime.........please help me |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
now you have page 2  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
bless you!!!!! now i can go to sleep its been a long time comming.....thanks |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
dixie , you are a cup of sunshine |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Beautifully Written! ARCTIC WIND |
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