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pisumnux
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since 2003-06-11
Posts 49
Troy, NY

0 posted 2003-06-11 11:15 AM


This one was written about a month and a half ago.

The spring is upon us.
The trees are once again becoming green.
The flowers are begining to bloom.
And life is returning to our world.

Yet clouds draw near.
My love is confused; her mind clouded,
Clouded by thoughts of her past.

She has changed since her return.
She responds differently
When I compliment her beauty.
She tells me she loves me a little less often.
She has much on her mind.
Though I am confident that
she will choose me in the end,
I am unsure given these clounds
Which appear in her mind.
I have endured much since I fell for her
Almost four months ago.
My heart has been battered and bruised.
And once it is healed, it is battered again.

I know not how it will turn out in the end.
Just as the road curves under the horizon,
So is our destiny hidden from me.
For the first time in my life,
there are mulitple possible outcomes of my situation
each with a chance of survival.
For the first time in my life,
I am truly scared
For I do not know which one will triumph.

So I pray to the fates to guide her.
I pray that our love blossom again
Just as the flowers bloom once more.
I pray that as life flows back into this world,
So may the love and the passion
Flow back into our courtship.
May the enlightening force known to our species
Bring her clarity rightly and swiftly.

[This message has been edited by pisumnux (06-11-2003 11:50 AM).]

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gemjop
Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
1 posted 2003-06-11 01:29 PM


hello, welcome to pip, this is the first poem i've read of yours, particularly loved this line....

~~Just as the road curves under the horizon,
So is our destiny hidden from me~~

wish i'd written it!

much love, gemma
xxxxxxxxx

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2003-06-11 01:37 PM


Beautiful melancholic write.
Welcome to Pip!
Love, Margherita

idleeyes86
Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64
Somewhere over the rainbow
3 posted 2003-06-11 01:42 PM


The poem is very personal, references to exact time mean that it is (presumably) a relationship of yours, but its not over personal in a way that it excludes the reader which I like, a lot of romantic poets wrote in the same personal way and it can be very effective
Foxyoasis
Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
4 posted 2003-06-11 02:39 PM


I have returned my love

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
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5 posted 2003-06-12 11:54 PM


So I pray to the fates to guide her.
I pray that our love blossom again
Just as the flowers bloom once more.
I pray that as life flows back into this world,
So may the love and the passion
Flow back into our courtship.
May the enlightening force known to our species
Bring her clarity rightly and swiftly.


The ache is felt in this one.
I truly hope that your love returs
your love the way you want her to.  
Hugs  
Ethel

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
6 posted 2003-06-13 03:41 AM


enjoyed reading

welcome to Passions!

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756
U.S.A.
7 posted 2003-06-24 04:12 PM


enjoyed,,
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2003-06-24 07:37 PM


Prayer is good...James
Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
9 posted 2003-06-24 07:43 PM


The yearning and burning is almost palpable!

Love can be scary because we feel so vulnerable, but I do believe that if it is meant to be, it will be!

Warm hugs,
EA

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
10 posted 2009-03-22 02:14 PM


Enjoyed this prayer!


ARCTIC WIND

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