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We Held Your Hand
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We Held Your Hand |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA 
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We Held Your Hand A Villanelle for Fathers' Day We hearkened to resounds of heaven’s whispering Your name, beheld in countenance of sovereign Grace. We held your hand until we heard the angels sing In harmonies melodic as the spawn of spring, Extolling visions of a hallowed time and place. We hearkened to resounds of heaven’s whispering A song so sweet, our yearning hearts envisioning Your dancing blithefully about celestial space. We held your hand until we heard the angels sing Songs of release from burdens earthly trek may bring, Our visions with the stars to see your joyous face. We hearkened to resounds of heaven’s whispering. Bequeathing now our hold to end all suffering, For mortal days so surely wrought in steadfast pace. We held your hand until we heard the angels sing One hand in ours, one touched upon seraphic wing, Our grasp released to bind ethereal embrace. We hearkened to resounds of heaven’s whispering; We held your hand until we heard the angels sing. (In loving memory of my father - C. Leonard Carlson - 1/4/23-4/23/02) by Nancy Carlson Ness |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Nan~So very very beautiful and touching piece. I found myself holding my breath in awe as I read. A wonderful tribute of remember to your father. Thank you for this timely keeper. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Nan, a most gracious, and loving, gift of memory. Thank you so much for sharing the love of your father with us. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Nan, you write like an angel. How fortunate for your Dad to have you with him, holding his hand when he passed. To experience those moments is a gift not all receive. Hugs and looking forward to seeing you in a couple of weeks. Marti |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Nan, this is a beautiful tribute to your father. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan This is pure honey, excellent.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh Nanners~ Beautifully penned feelings, dear poetess~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Most tender write Nan, and brought tears to my eyes. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
One hand in ours, one touched upon seraphic wing, Our grasp released to bind ethereal embrace. We hearkened to resounds of heaven’s whispering; We held your hand until we heard the angels sing. Nan, this is so very beautiful. Your love is pouring out in this wonderful tribute to your Dad. Thank you for sharing your heart with us.  Heart hugs to you, Lady Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...and that is why you're the teacher, and we're the students!  Villanelles are difficult to write, but you have written this one masterfully! Loves 'n hugs, Linda |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The harmony in your poem is like a slow dance that enraptures the reader. I especially liked the yearning and envisioning, and the blessing of your Fathers memory. Beautifully penned Nan~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so beautiful, Nan. I will always regret having not made it in time to hold my Father's hand. M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful... touching... and perfectly penned. *S* What better way to welcome #27? *S* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Nan...such grace and tenderness in being with a loved one at the end...your words capture this so beautifully. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yes you sure did hold his hand, right to the very end. Wow, I really felt that one! I remember being in his bed that night Nan, and this brought tears to my eyes. And his hat - remember you offered to me but I could not accept. I will never forget that gesture. As I stood outside that room in the hospital I saw "a family" connecting that cared, and in your own way Nan, you have finally reached the point of acceptance and let go. I know yada, yada. This was an excellent villanelle (whatever that is, and I know it is something darn hard knowing you), and as I read it I figure it must be my personality you like 'cause it sure 'aint my poetry  but we lub each other right?[This message has been edited by Mysteria (06-11-2003 04:00 PM).] |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Nan, your words are exquisite. What a wonderful tribute. Patricia |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Beautiful, Nan, just beautiful.... if only we all could be so tenderly honored at our passing.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
fabulous write of poetry,,,, QjQ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
No words by me can do this justice. Beautiful, heartfelt writing, my friend  |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Did an angel write this as well? Your father must be proud, Nan.  ~ElizabethDreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
God, this was so very beautiful. I really don't have the words but I know the feeling. You have a way with words. Sincerely, Sauni Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Nan, this is absolutely beauitful ... from the flow and rhythmic tones, to the warmth and genuine love contained within these lines. Just beautiful, my friend. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nan - words can't describe this warm write... BC |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very beautiful and sad |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Nancy this is truly a beautiful tribute to your father so tenderly penned. Maree. adding this to my library. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'd like to sincerely thank each and every one of you, my poetic friends - who've taken time to stop by and read this poem. I wrote this to read at my dad's funeral last year, but hadn't posted in Open until now. It's been a year, but I still keep some very special personal "Dad stuff" close at hand to remind me of him... Thank you again... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, dearest friend, and his voice is reverberating still through the chortles of the angels as now your dad is one and he will always sing in your heart as the love of a father and daughter is forever! (sigh) This is a most touching treasure, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nan - you're the best Nan, you surely are. I'm always amazed at the way you know the language and how you write poetry... BCI |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Nan...I'm so sorry I missed this before, but I'm glad I found it tonight. This is one of the most beautiful creations to come from your pen and your heart. Just gorgeous, my friend, and a perfect tribute to your dad. Love and hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very lovely Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Nan Your words were so sad yet so very beautiful. I was the only one in our family who never got to hold my dying father's hand and I have struggled with that fact for some time but at the same time I don't think I would have been strong enough to cope with seeing him slip away. Some things just aren't meant to be. "Love is the lifeline I cling to when grief threatens to pull me down into eternal darkness" Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Oh Nan what a heart moving gem, wish I had the right words to say how much I like it. ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Vielen Danke, as my dad would surely say... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
"We held your hand until we heard the angels sing" ah yes.... from another who's been there too -- you captured the curse , the awe, and the mystery of the moment quite melodically! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good God Nan . . . this is breathtaking . . . He is proud of you xxoo |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Nan, this is heartbreaking but also very uplifting. A wonderful poem to be saved and savored! Corinne |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Forgive me for not having read this before now. My loss...for this is a beautiful poem in memory of a man that obviously touched your life... Thank You Nan, for the share... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh Nan, this is so beautiful. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Much gratitude, my friends... |
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