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Magnus
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0 posted 2003-06-07 08:12 PM


Oh bright of star in heaven high
within the black of darkened fold.
Where be thy gleam in lusting sigh
once ‘pon the green of glinting gold.

As eons flow the crisp in swirl
of ages gone and yet to be.
And comets fall in earthward hurl
into the blue of raging sea.

Mayhaps the glow of fullest moon
within the grasp of autumn air.
Now bathing earth in soaring swoon
has masked the sight of starry stare.

Steadfast ye stand into the eve
of blackened floor to willing eyes.
While far below the tillers leave
till ‘gain the sun is past noon high.

With lids apart your watching gaze
eternal there born of the age.
A brilliance in a starlit blaze
as endless war and battle rage.

For though I’ll rest the earthen grave
blind to the light your birth has brought.
Countless will live and of you rave
in heaven’s search of what is wrought.


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1 posted 2003-06-07 09:50 PM


For though I’ll rest the earthen grave
blind to the light your birth has brought.
Countless will live and of you rave
in heaven’s search of what is wrought.

How true dear Magnus. After we are gone....the stars will still be watching - always and forever. love this. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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2 posted 2003-06-07 10:02 PM


all i can say is terrific and fabulous write n read....

Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ

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3 posted 2003-06-07 10:28 PM


Barry,

Quite a richness in all your phrases here.
Enjoyed reading.

Sid

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4 posted 2003-06-07 11:41 PM


With lids apart your watching gaze
eternal there born of the age.
A brilliance in a starlit blaze
as endless war and battle rage.

For though I’ll rest the earthen grave
blind to the light your birth has brought.
Countless will live and of you rave
in heaven’s search of what is wrought.


Absolutely beautiful, Barry.  



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5 posted 2003-06-07 11:54 PM


Barry...A tremendous poem. So very well-written and beautifully rhymed. ***Ivy Rose
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6 posted 2003-06-08 04:16 AM


awesome!
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7 posted 2003-06-08 01:49 PM


Beautiful feelings and beautiful rhythm!
Love, Margherita

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8 posted 2003-06-08 03:13 PM


With lids apart your watching gaze
eternal there born of the age.
A brilliance in a starlit blaze
as endless war and battle rage.

For though I’ll rest the earthen grave
blind to the light your birth has brought.
Countless will live and of you rave
in heaven’s search of what is wrought.

OK Barry, I read this countless times trying to get the full meaning.  I think you speak of Him and the ones who do not know Him.  Please let me know if I am wrong about this.  This is what I took from this piece.  I am trying to become more analytical in my reading which I believe will help me to become a better writer.  Heck, just simply reading the flow of your rhyme gives me a challenge for to strive.

You are awesome!


Patricia



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9 posted 2003-06-08 03:50 PM


Pat,  thanx bunches...in fact....to all...
thanx bunches...

This is of a star..  one which always sits
in the heavens,  watching over us each night
throughout all of earth's time..and even into
the infinity of time itself....

Yes,  it is difficult to sometimes discern
what a poet writes...  I got the inspire
from a sonnet written by John Keats which
was found on blank paper within a book of
W. Shakespeare's poems.
  
The first line goes... "Bright star! Would I
were stedfast as thou art"  This is what
I derived my thoughts from.  

Startime55
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10 posted 2003-06-08 04:11 PM


*sigh* you capture the magic of the stars like no other....Stars hold such importance to me...I feel in such a state of awe every time I gaze upon them...I am glad Keats inspired your talent to flow with the wonder of the stars...Magnificent writing, Barry...

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(sigh) The stars is always the best place to start the journey, sweet friend, only imagine how many destinies could surround Andromeda! (big hugggssssss) This is spellbinding, sweet friend, you know how to make great quantum leaps, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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12 posted 2003-06-09 11:22 PM


This star-gazer loved your "Star Quest"!

Warm hugs and an appreciative smile!
EA

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