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Open Poetry #26

just leave me alone

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

0 posted 2003-06-07 07:40 PM

all this time i spend on you
i get nothing back
i take care of you
and you attack
i feed you
and you bite
i cloth you and you lash out
i keep this roof over our head
and you try and ruin it all
iv kept you out of trouble
why cant you just do the same
you know she has to work
and you wont give up
you want her
well im your older sister
and i can be her too
but you wont give me the chance
even thought she asked you to
i sing your notes
and mine too
i answer all the calls
i pay the bills sometime too
but all i get is ****
always wathing you
well now i give up
you can go live on your own
in the streets if thats what you want
im not putting up with anymore crap.

i am in trouble but no one knows it if you can figure out my messages thenhelp me.

ESP
Member Elite

since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

1 posted 2003-06-07 08:27 PM

Extremely powerful write, charged with emotion......hang in there lil angel...*hugs*
Luv, Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-06-07 10:38 PM

Speak your anger. I liked the expressed emotion. Awesome write.

Cold hands means a warm heart

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

3 posted 2003-06-07 10:42 PM

good write,,,,shows visions...

Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ

crimson tear
Member

since 2003-06-07

Posts 76
Massachusetts

4 posted 2003-06-07 10:49 PM

good writing you can feel the anger

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-06-08 04:24 AM

good vent

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

6 posted 2003-06-08 12:05 PM

thanks everyone. i wasnt sure how it would come off. i guess it was ok.

i am in trouble but no one knows it if you can figure out my messages thenhelp me.

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