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MikeFessel
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0 posted 2003-06-07 08:12 AM



True feelings proclaimed insidious,
recasting inherent nature in devience.
Yearning to emote the inner being within,
society binds entwine the suffering.

Wrapped in time rules trump morality,
moray turned law shifting of reality.
Condemning many binding countless more
blinding the innocent corrupting the pure.

Once our souls embraced we are no more,
victims of those who destroy as they pour
liquid youth into molds of conform
leaving frigid callous hollowed form.

On we journey though stripped of goal
mindless though opinions screaming strong.
Beliefs run rampant to cover the fall,
illusive attempts pervade an empty core.

   By Michael J Fessel

© Copyright 2003 Michael J Fessel - All Rights Reserved
Patricia
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1 posted 2003-06-07 08:38 AM


Mike,

I think I got hold of this, even though my mind is a bit fuzzy this morning.  Yes, you are right...about the molding..about the lack of freedom to be unique and voice that uniqueness without ridicule.  It is funny in a world that continually talks of acceptance of diversity, they want us to be homogenous.

OK, my friend, I hope I got it...because now you got me thinking along those lines!  


Patricia

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-06-07 02:01 PM


damn Mike! This is very deep, very thought-provoking...awesome writing! Will have to read over it again and again.
MikeFessel
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3 posted 2003-06-07 02:42 PM


Patricia,
Ha ha yes. I would say you've interpretted is just about right. Thanks Patricia, you're reply made me feel good

       Mike

MikeFessel
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4 posted 2003-06-07 03:15 PM


Passing Shadows,
Oh thank you so much. Yay! That is like the ultimate compliment! I am glad you liked this, I usually write my poems very quickly, but I actually put time and effort into this one LOL Seriously, this took me 3 days, and not 5 minutes a day either. Trying to get these lines straight drained me pretty good. But at least I kind of like it, and I NEVER like my poems. Ok I'm done rambling for now

      Mike

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