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Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

0 posted 2003-06-06 09:47 PM

Her Path

The calling came interrupting her youth.
Read wistful words she mistook as truth.
A path she must choose, a road to walk
Profoundly written with sidewalk chalk.

As years passed away as years will do,
She recalled the girl she’d once knew.
Now lost and ‘lone at dead end street,
Where nothingness and no where meet.

With no where to go and nothing to lose,
She walked backward the path she choose
To the see the words that caused her pain
But so long ago washed away by the rain.

Heart heavy with anguish of lost days past
With epiphany, she finds her truth at last.
To follow the path that is alone your own,
Her new life's credo now etched in stone.

[This message has been edited by Patricia (06-07-2003 12:14 AM).]

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2003-06-06 10:12 PM

Yes,  follow your own two feet down a path
that belongs to no other.  Very wise words
Patricia.  I think I have worn out a few
pair of shoes on several paths...not all
mine..over the years.  You are rhyming nicely.

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

2 posted 2003-06-06 10:14 PM

nicely written about paths,,,
enjoyed the read...

Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2003-06-06 10:22 PM

Going backward to move forward and find yourself....Absolutely Magnificent...

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2003-06-06 10:44 PM

Wonderful words here Patricia, and oh, how true. Enjoyed this very much. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

5 posted 2003-06-06 10:57 PM

Patricia, this was a wonderful write, and how true it is, to live by the supposed truths of others does not let us create our own way and path, so always wondering what might have been, enjoy the path you follow now.

Sincerely
Rick

Poe_Pot_Pie
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since 2003-06-01

Posts 107
Canada

6 posted 2003-06-06 11:03 PM

A real way with words! I believe I have read your poems before and enjoy them very much.

It would be get if you took a look at my poems and commented on them.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2003-06-06 11:48 PM

As I read, I thought about walking backwards...and truthfully, we must all find the courage to return, grow and try again.
All blessings...nice write. TD

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2003-06-06 11:57 PM

Patricia - to revisit the pain is remarkable, I don't really know if I could even though at times I still live it...

BC

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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9 posted 2003-06-07 03:19 AM

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

10 posted 2003-06-07 04:52 AM

For Patricia,

If opportunity, won’t knock
It may be time to build a door
Then your hinges will not lock
they will be swinging evermore

If your ship, does not sail in
It might be time, to take a swim
And venture out into the deep
Where many secrets tend to seep

If paths go down a dead end street
and make you feel, less then complete?
Then you might have to build a road
So you won’t be stuck, with that toad!

Patricia, do you remember all the toads
you were telling me about, that you’ve had to kick off your lily pad?

lol

Patricia, your poetry is getting better all the time!

I hope, you are too,

Richy

[This message has been edited by Richy (06-07-2003 04:56 AM).]

MikeFessel
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since 2003-04-19

Posts 321
Brooklyn, NYC, USA

11 posted 2003-06-07 08:03 AM

Patricia,
Okay this is amazing! Oh I love this poem so much! Such great writing, as good as writing can get.

The imagery of the writing in sidewalk chalk, the little girl, the chalk washed away, so fantastic!

ooh all my favorite lines [I am so annoying I know

]

"Read wistful words she mistook as truth.
A path she must choose, a road to walk
Profoundly written with sidewalk chalk.

Now lost and ‘lone at dead end street,
Where nothingness and no where meet.

To the see the words that caused her pain
But so long ago washed away by the rain.

With epiphany, she finds her truth at last.
To follow the path that is alone your own,
Her new life's credo now etched in stone."

What an ending!

This is easily one of the best poems I have ever read

Mike

[This message has been edited by MikeFessel (06-07-2003 08:08 AM).]

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