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A wilted rose
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A wilted rose |
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SarBear Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 205Massachusetts 
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The Pain Just wont subside Thoughts of suicide are constantly on my wondering mind I’m along for this bumpy ride The last petal has fallen off the red rose leaving the stem barren Its thorns stabbing into my throbbing heart I’m off to a rough start the days go by like years sleeping is my only vacation I shower myself in darkness cannot find the light My world revolves around black and white Rainbows are unheard of in my lonesome world You go count your lucky stars well I sit here wishing for some By Sara Connolly |
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SarBear Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 205Massachusetts |
I guess everyone hates it? |
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[In]Visible Junior Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 11 |
I like it, it's a very accurate portait of depression. Stay with us, yeah? |
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SarBear Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 205Massachusetts |
thank you-im staying-this was in the past...im better now |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
~Sighs~ I've felt this in the past. Glad you've decided to Share your talent With us  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the forum Sara. I'm glad you read the guidelines about posting poetry that glories suicide. This poem does not so it's ok. I hope you enjoy your time here. Please check your email for something special.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Sara, this is a very heartfelt debut, dearest friend, keep counting those stars and believe in wishes coming true as they will sparkle and answer your call! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this! Welcome to Passions, sweet Sara, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sara, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome Sara: I am late to the group, and sorry I missed this first time round. The emotion you portray in your work was well done... I have noted that sometimes we hesitate to read of what seems painful...or too close. Sometimes it is mood, sometimes it is deeper. Don't be afraid to write, the guidelines here are generous, and there are great people to help us steer between. Nice work. ThisDiamond |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Sara, I know how this feels, as I have suffered depression also. My thoughts and prayers are with you.  |
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chinesestone Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 76China |
why its tital so sad. give your my hugs,i hope you are a happy people  |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
though a little dark in content, so well placed words.. enjoyed. glad your better and most of all Welcome to passions,, keep it up A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Sara...thank God it was from your past. Reminded me of the time when I was in pain over a lost relationship and I would stay up all night watching television (TBN) until I would finally fall asleep exhausted and I would always hope that I wouldn't wake up in the morning because the pain would still be there...it definately gets better....James |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
You expressed depression accurately here. I could feel your emotions and could relate. As I have said before...although I hate the fact that others have felt this sadness, there is at the same time a comfort in knowing someone else has felt the same. Thank you for sharing.  Patricia |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sara: there you are - was looking for your entrance . . . nice writing indeed those stars they come and go they do Welcome to PIP! xxoo |
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crimson tear Member
since 2003-06-07
Posts 76Massachusetts |
good poem sara. i thought some lines were uneccesary but all in all good work. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Welcome to PIP. This poem is a clear statement of heartache and its associated pains. I hope you hang around to heal, become strog again, and show us what else you can do when vision is not narrowed by the distorting lens of pain. Thanks for sharing your feelings with us all. |
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