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dani
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since 2003-05-10
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0 posted 2003-06-05 10:35 AM



If I ever had him then what is happening to me wouldn't be happening
He was there and it helped then he went
I was suddenly in the middle of the ocean
Nobody to help me but myself
I was drowning and I still am
I lost the safety and comfort
I never had him because he didn't care


this never started out as a poem i was just messaging one of my friends and i came out with it

how many ways to say i love u... just 1... you make me want to die

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mirror man
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since 2001-01-08
Posts 814

1 posted 2003-06-05 11:12 AM


I think I know what you mean.  This is my fault, I'm not understanding a lot of what people mean when they say and do things.  But I think I know this one, which is to say he didn't care enough to stay, so he maybe never cared.  It's an honest write, and that's good, I think.

[This message has been edited by mirror man (06-05-2003 11:14 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
2 posted 2003-06-05 01:08 PM


I know someone like that
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