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BLACK (written by my son)
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BLACK (written by my son) |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
This Poem was written by my 10 year old son. He asked that I post it here....His name is TJ ___________________________________________ Black is hatred living inside you. Black is emptiness in your life. Black is scolding food in your mouth. It's ashes from a fire. It's darkness of the night. Dark is a hiding place for light. Black is the smell of smoke from fire. It is the sound of the fire crackling. Black is the sign of death and the color of it's black rose. Black is the darkness in your soul. Lighten up. |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Wow. That was a rather interesting read. I enjoyed it. I especially like the turning point of the poem at the end with the line "Lighten up." I think it was rather insightful and extremely well developed. Your son has extraordinary talent. Junior Member, yv [This message has been edited by yv (06-04-2003 05:22 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very well written,,,  Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Thank you Yv and QjQ  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
10 years old, did you say! My goodness, at that age I was writing about fairies and a candycane world--now that I come to think about it, I still am! LOL Your son is far beyond his years in his thinking and his writing ability. I must admit however, that I was delighted with his closing line. My heart feels lighter now knowing that he isn't mired in the darkness and that he has a great sense of humor! He is very special--just like his proud Dad! Love & hugs to you both, Linda |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Thank you linda. You'll be happy to know that TJ is a very happy go lucky boy. His heart is filled with love for everyone, including Stray animals in which he keeps bringing home to save from the cruelty of the street. At least that's the reason i get with each stray kitten. LOL |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon |
Tell him he's a true poet at heart, and keep writing! ~Talia |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
A bright boy to be proud of. Joyce |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful TJ! write on! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Albert, I hope you encourage your son to sign up soon...as you know, we're only supposed to be posting our own poetry, but we've many "family members" around here and with poetry like this? We don't want to let TJ get away! I'll look forward to welcoming your Son into Passions when he's ready! As for stray kitties? Ah...big heart!!!  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah a boy after my own heart! When a soul loves animals they are indeed gentle to the core. I hope you encourage him to sign up too, writing is an excellent outlet for the emotions of a youngster growing up, and the teen forum has so much to offer. Nicely done indeed for such a young man. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I love it....ligthen up.....hee hee good job sweetie!!  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a great write for such a young mind * does he mean "scalding" as in hot or scolding as in reprimand... just thought he might want to check those spellings out... the teacher in me  M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write for one so young.. I do hope he signs up and becomes a member real quick! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
~~~Dark is a hiding place for light~~~ Hi Albert! i especially love this line. tell him to join this forum soon, he'd really be a valuable member wouldn't he! A childs insight into things can be so beautiful. Its going into my library, to remind me just how creative every person can be, irrespective of age etc. lots of love, gemma xxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Wow!! 10 years old!!? That's wonderful!!!!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssssss) ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT!!! (smiles) You, young man, are a very talented poet just like your dad, who I have been blessed to have known as a friend for over a year! Oh my gosh, I sure hope you sign up as a member, sweet friend, and also tell your dad I miss talking to him so much and would love to hear from him again, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet T.J, thank you for sharing!    May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
bump..... xxxx |
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