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How About You
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How About You |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I see you like the notes a river plays drawing me down to the light and the words of some familiar song when all along you listened on some other end of time looking west for the setting sun just as I did loosening your clothing in the heat in front of fans from some other room You opened and closed your heart walked in parks and on streets when you were heady with joy or dense with loss of something that seemed important to you at the time You remember the scent of skin some nights when summer loosens the closed windows Taking measure of yourself against a tree like me you grew when you looked to see how much it felt like only yesterday that time stole something from you while your eyes were closed in all those blinks I wrestle with the demons that catch my fabric too and sometimes I’d just like to stop and let them hold me just to see if they are as fierce as they pretend to be How about you [This message has been edited by Martie (06-04-2003 05:06 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How about misty eyes... doggone it girl... you have to quit catching me unawares... nah, nevermind...we could use a good cloudburst every now and then... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, "how about you?"-- I'll tell you one thing for sure, Dear Martie, you sure know how to tug at my harp strings! Lovin' hugs, EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie I've tamed and named my dragon Randy,  |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Beautiful. I do battle my own demons sometimes and sometimes I see they aren't as demonic as the situation makes them out to be. This poem spoke to me. Absolutely stellar. Junior Member, yv |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nicely presented write,,,, Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wrestle with the demons that catch my fabric too and sometimes I’d just like to stop and let them hold me just to see if they are as fierce as they pretend to be ah..to stop and face them... sometimes yeah... it would be a temptation to stop..but we get so used to running from them I sometimes think we forget how to... as always... insightful and filled with beauty.... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 I wrestle with the demons that catch my fabric too and sometimes I’d just like to stop and let them hold me just to see if they are as fierce as they pretend to be If there were a "shaking her head smilie" in wonderment - I would be using it here. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Hi Martie, I really enjoyed this poem of yours! I liked how it started out, half pondering and half reminiscing about someone you knew, or perhaps didn’t. How you then brought forth this person’s sudden realization of how fleeting life can be. And then how, toward the end, you in a way console this person, by sharing that you too, are vulnerable to the afflictions of internal anguish. Showing how undaunted, and defiant you are, taking on and wrestling your own fears. Was a very motivating, and inspiring finish. “How About You?” A very nice and challenging end, to a wonderful tale. I am in awe, of your writing, and of your sensitivity Martie, Truly amazing! Richy |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Well...mine only look like demons to other people. A great write. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Count me in! Let's dare 'em.... Your references in this poem are simply captivating, picking up imagery from several directions, and you merge them forever into a single stream of thought and meaning. "I see you like the notes a river plays drawing me down to the light"......... "I wrestle with the demons that catch my fabric too and sometimes I’d just like to stop and let them hold me just to see if they are as fierce as they pretend to be How about you " As always with your work, I can enjoy the pictures you give, or follow the deeper invitation....either way it's memorable. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nicely done as usual Martie....Life is a continual wrestle with many things and the experience can be essential sometimes. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome writing! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I tried to pick a favorite part and couldn't... it's seamless and superb. *S* And considering the many paths it offered to my thoughts... I'd have to say Yup. *G* |
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Lilith New Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 2 |
Amazing work |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - again, you are amazing... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You opened and closed your heart walked in parks and on streets when you were heady with joy or dense with loss of something that seemed important to you at the time Lovingly said of those ties that bind us and twist our fate. Hugs Martie~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Exquisite~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Taking measure of yourself against a tree like me you grew" Wow..Martie... "when you looked to see how much it felt like only yesterday that time stole something from you while your eyes were closed in all those blinks" I can't even think of what to say except that your express so well, that you awaken all kinds of feelings in me when I least expect it. M |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"How About You"... Indeed - I do love your words, Martie...  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Martie, your words always touch my heart so deeply, dearest friend, when I was a little boy I had too many demons to struggle with and it breaks my heart that I could never live one happy day as a boy, and now those same demons from before I let confront me but they just don't see to retaliate in attack anymore since they seem to realize my new strength! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, you are very special to all of us and together we can help keep demons away, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
such imagery Martie and such feeling - well you do it every time and I stand in awe every time - lovely stuff you weave my friend - Paul |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"You remember the scent of skin some nights when summer loosens the closed windows..." Like tonight... I have read this many times since you posted it. It is different for me each time. Thank you for sharing it here. |
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