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quatro
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0 posted 2003-06-04 01:09 AM



With You


The old saying goes
You don't know me
unless you've walked
a mile in my shoes.

But what if -- let's just say,
I took them off
and walked a mile
without?

Would my understanding
be anymore clearer?
Would my vision
be anymore brighter?

Would the soles of both my feet
grow weary and caloused
from the rugged terrain?
Would they even bleed?

I tell you, dear friend,
I stand here with you,
beside you,
not in front of or behind you.

With every step you make,
I will shuffle to meet yours.
If your shoes are tattered and torn,
I'll give you mine --
and walk without.

I'll walk with you
through the deepest valleys
and across the widest deserts
and beyond.

No, I don't know
who you are
or where you are coming from.
I know only that I am willing
to take each step
with you.

quatro
06/03/03

© Copyright 2003 Naome James - All Rights Reserved
Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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1 posted 2003-06-04 01:11 AM


Hello Naomi

Your words were so full of love and were so beautifully written.

"A friend bears the song
in my heart and sings it to me
when my memory fails"

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2003-06-04 11:55 AM


actually the opening verse rather reminded me of the old spin to that saying--"never judge a man until you've walked a mile in his shoes--that way you're a mile away and you still have his shoes!"



But I do say I like your take on it much better. Lovely sentiment and I enjoyed the read.

passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-06-04 01:02 PM


wonderful! very thought-provoking and tender ending
bslicker
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4 posted 2003-06-06 08:47 AM


"I know only that I am willing
to take each step
with you."

i think the ending really finishes this.
enjoyed

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Patricia
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5 posted 2003-06-06 08:58 AM


No, I don't know
who you are
or where you are coming from.
I know only that I am willing
to take each step
with you.

Ahh...what a generous, kind heart you must have to entertain this notion.  This is the true spirit of love you express.

Beautiful write!


Patricia


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6 posted 2003-06-06 09:12 AM


absolutely a beautiful heart you display I like this very much all friends should be this way.....
Enchantress
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7 posted 2003-06-06 09:15 AM


Very hearfelt write here Naome.
Much enjoyed the read this morning.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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