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Rising Lovesong
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Rising Lovesong |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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In your heat rise where thunder rolls where shimmer meets horizon and you can't breathe for humid air far off where the lone tree grows, there, under it's shade where buzzing flies escape and the coyote rests I will meet you there, I will be your spirit of the wind, caressing your skin making the leaves whisper lovesong and like an invisible dust-devil I will whirl into and around bringing shivers to your skin in the heat of day you will reach to touch me but, ever gone, you will smile, knowing I am there in spirit Then go to the stream and step in I will be your water sprite to quench your lust and sooth your soul where heat meets cool and dust is washed muscles relax and time is well spent in the dusk of day look to the horizon where the last shimmer remains there, by the lone tree and know, I will be your love if you but listen to the wind and hear the leaves play lovesong |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"you will reach to touch me but, ever gone, you will smile, knowing I am there in spirit" this part..is perfect...makes the whole feel of the poem I think  |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
a beautiful expression and vision presented.. Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This is a rousing song of rising love. Music to one's ears--and heart. Warm hugs, EA P.S. Check out the "Sunshine" rictameter I wrote for you!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah lovely Karilea... Much enjoyed this lyrical piece this afternoon. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
A beautifully romantic verse from you, Karilea. You know I love those. Lovely, Patricia |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Karilea, you sure know how to make one sigh. This is absolutely beautiful m'friend Maree.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky...James |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
one of your best enjoyed this |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Soft, sensual...filled with bridled passion in the heat of day....when one would think of dozing off until......... Excellent write KJ. Enjoyed this. |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
~sigh~ you do this sooo well. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...such a subtle sensuality in this beauty. Much enjoyed! |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
beautiful... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Then go to the stream and step in I will be your water sprite to quench your lust and sooth your soul Just lovely Karilea. Beautiful!! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Karilea, ==================== I will be your love if you but listen to the wind and hear the leaves play lovesong ==================== Well, once again you have written of wonderful things in wonderful ways. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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DozenRoses4UV Junior Member
since 2003-06-03
Posts 16 |
WOW This is really great DozenRoses4UV |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful...I'm listening |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well, I see you haven't lost your touch....I really like this.. "you will reach to touch me but, ever gone, you will smile, knowing I am there in spirit" Very creative all the way through! The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I will be your love if you but listen to the wind and hear the leaves play lovesong Karilea, this is such a beautiful love song. I love it, Lady!!  Hugs Ethel |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunshine - oh my, romance is what I read, another excellent write... BC |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling).... I told you.... |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
"I will be your love if you but listen" I'm not the first to be enchanted by this write, but this is an exquisite couplet. You find such spirit and meaning in the lonesomeness of the prairie. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
X-quisite m'lady |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the moth is late...but smiling and sighing. so lovely K, and made even more so that it comes from the inspire in a fellow poets words.  Im still imagining your voice ... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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