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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2003-06-03 12:07 PM


I wish sweet young thing
to bask in your harsh ignorant sun
writing rambling incarnate
rhythmic vibrations
late into the night
or was it morning when I first
lusted after listlessness
from a distance
twenty miles hence
since remembered
in a park
in a small city
existing only in my
little
piece of cranial matter
from day to day I spit laughter
in the direction of the dawning
of hell
since the saints are on strike
the world has gone to the dogs
or at least African frogs
I say
or at least mutter under muted breath
to myself
on a cool autumn eve under duress
of self psychosis
wither I come or go
I do sit at least four times a day
drinking carbonated beverages
as if elixers from Apollo himself
See things do I?
I have seen many things
yet remember few
and care about none
for I am but a god
a diluted lunatic lost
in festering stupidity
since I lost my Id in search
of Freudian salvation
I do wander and wane from time
to time
hunger calls so I bid adieu
or at least good bye
and all frivolous archaic expressions
of manners
Farewell to the key of G

[This message has been edited by Brad Majors (06-03-2003 12:10 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-06-03 12:13 PM


"See things do I?
I have seen many things
yet remember few
and care about none
for I am but a god
a diluted lunatic lost
in festering stupidity
since I lost my Id in search
of Freudian salvation"

what a cool write

Brad Majors
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2 posted 2003-06-03 12:18 PM


why thank you!
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3 posted 2003-06-03 04:38 PM


Excellent flow of words and beautifuly told.
Thanks,
Eric

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4 posted 2003-06-07 05:31 PM


cool write BM
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5 posted 2003-06-08 04:55 AM


wow...I usually have no words for your writings, but I still want you to know I'm here and I'm in awe
Brad Majors
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6 posted 2003-06-09 05:39 PM


Thank you
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7 posted 2003-06-09 07:44 PM


Brad :

this is exquisite:

I lost my Id in search
of Freudian salvation

LMAO - can I print this out and hand it in as my weekly therapy journal . . .
pleaaassseeee  

icebox
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8 posted 2003-06-09 07:54 PM


"the world has gone to the dogs
or at least African frogs
I say"

Now THERE is an image!

Bravo!

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9 posted 2003-06-09 07:55 PM


Excellent!

Kelly

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There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things

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10 posted 2003-06-09 10:50 PM


Excellent craftsmanship here.  The mood
conveyed perfectly...

Bill Charles
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11 posted 2003-06-09 11:47 PM


Brad - your words used in this are come together as one. Great write...

BC

Brad Majors
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12 posted 2003-06-10 02:16 AM


thank you
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