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Wobbly Head Bob
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0 posted 2003-06-03 11:17 AM



Hear what I say
Act like I do
This is the way
I push on you

Just like the day
Felt out of tune
I walked away
And left the room

In came the sun
Outshined the moon
No more the one
That you impugn

I found the road
Out from the dark
And so I strode
To find my mark

Now I’m out there
Unguided hand
Breathing new air
Making my stand

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1 posted 2003-06-03 11:25 AM


really like the ending of this...
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2 posted 2003-06-03 11:51 AM


nice
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3 posted 2003-06-03 12:33 PM


"Now I’m out there
Unguided hand
Breathing new air
Making my stand"

Excellent close of wonderful poem about true inner freedom.  Nice write. TD

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4 posted 2003-06-03 12:34 PM


I like this poem and also really likeed the end as well. Nice write.

Make your words as sweet as honey, someday you may have to eat them.

[This message has been edited by apoetdreams (06-03-2003 12:36 PM).]

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