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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-06-03 10:15 AM


Dawn

he spoke
to me
in velvet
traces felt
like silk
and after
cotton spin
he was
gone


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1 posted 2003-06-03 10:18 AM


Oh, Helen.....this one is a and going into my libary. Yes !! hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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2 posted 2003-06-03 11:17 AM


"he spoke
to me
in velvet
traces felt
like silk"

what an awesome way to describe a man's voice...wow

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3 posted 2003-06-03 11:55 AM


well done!
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4 posted 2003-06-03 04:39 PM


Wow....!!
Eric

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5 posted 2003-06-04 01:07 AM



No words..
just need your work to be recognized more.

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

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6 posted 2003-06-04 03:00 AM




This poem, woven with it’s choice words of varying textures, was not only appealing to the sense of sight, but to the sense of feel, as well.

Very smooth, and delicate,


And very much enjoyed!


Richy



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7 posted 2003-06-04 03:04 AM


a short poem,but very good,

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8 posted 2003-06-04 03:22 AM


he spoke
to me
in velvet
traces felt
like silk


I love this verse. Simply beautiful!!

Hugs  
Ethel

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9 posted 2003-06-04 03:53 PM


You know Helen you can paint the most vivid pictures in such few words, and so beautifully too.
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10 posted 2003-06-05 04:58 AM


just beautiful, you always have a way to get into my thoughts
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