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why I am wearing a bra |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
I might get it done for some women but that exclusive cartel is a topography that I fence in and rustle into the folds of my satin gloves the rest of the dereliction hardly raises a glass when I pass through the room I have a variety of ailments pertaining to world events but I keep them under wrap and bandage after all I am not a politico I am a cockroach scurrying in the basement hoping the lights don’t get switched on hey, don’t judge me by the skin of my teeth I practice abstinence when it concerns the dentists I would never expose my breasts that is why I always wear a bra I think you ladies know what I mean if not than excuse the inclusion I wanted to take a seat in the captains tower and watch how you all get it done please know that the whispers are all based in concrete and the kisses are placed with love even in my obituary the language will inevitably smooth over the kinks that kept the man in stitches |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
chuckling here  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
yeah, I know what you mean... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
LOL good work! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Drexler, drexler, drexler, shaking my head in amused admiration... yer a trip. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
serenity's same thought came to my mind  M |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
You know, I love your critique message, and I am trying very hard to understand what you're doing, so I think that I can afford to offer you some reply. This poem really required a lot of thought for me to so much as interpret, and having done so, I don't find it humourous as most of the other replies in this thread do, but rather sad... it's the whole "do I dare disturb the universe?" mentality, isn't it? You are afraid to play any role, to expose yourself to the world, because of how it would react to you if you'd do so. Revealing yourself, your opinions and thoughts on the world, would seem to you as embarassing as being caught without your bra on. Because you don't wish to expose yourself. You don't know what others will think. So you keep it silent, you keep it under wraps, keep yourself "in stitches," with the hopes that nobody will ever understand you or draw out your feelings for public regard. You don't feel that you matter, or have any role, but wish only to sit back and watch the whole world function without you. It's very likely that I'm wrong in my interpretation. If so, could you please correct me? I very much enjoy this poem and wish to appreciate the depth that it has to offer. Thank you very much, Parasite Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world. ~Percy Bysshe Shelley [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (06-02-2003 11:22 AM).] |
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joelle New Member
since 2003-04-01
Posts 8 |
I really got a kick out of this one! Good job! |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
at times, i dont even know what Im writing...sometimes i just like the sound of the words I put together. however, have read over this i can say.... "I might get it done for some women but that exclusive cartel is a topography that I fence in and rustle into the folds of my satin gloves the rest of the dereliction hardly raises a glass when I pass through the room" OK, I was thinking about the women in my life and how strange it is for that to be plural, and how the actual quality of the women is pretty high, (take that however you want) sometimes i pass myself in the mirror and start laughing, wondering how I am doing it.....I am especially reminded of this when I get the complete opposite response, which is what the second part of the stanza was about... "I have a variety of ailments pertaining to world events but I keep them under wrap and bandage after all I am not a politico" i was thinking about how self absorbed my work is, so what should I write about, politics? that would surely cause a ruckus, because Im sure we are not all on the same page, and I dont care to defend my beliefs..believing them is enough for me..i am not a crusader "I am a cockroach scurrying in the basement hoping the lights don’t get switched on hey, don’t judge me by the skin of my teeth I practice abstinence when it concerns the dentists" who am i to say anyhting anyway, just an average guy getting through the day, I dont need anyones judgements "I would never expose my breasts that is why I always wear a bra I think you ladies know what I mean if not than excuse the inclusion I wanted to take a seat in the captains tower and watch how you all get it done" this is the only really complex part, as much as I am open about my feelings, I am sure never to let my guard down, or ever completely expose myself, hence the bare breast reference, which leads me to women and how it always seems for me the more they expose of themselves the more control it seems to have over you, like a sense of responsilibity now that theyve shared something private of themselves with you..I dont see this work the opposite way very often....something like that, hence the "excuse the inclusion", just in case they think Im completely wrong "please know that the whispers are all based in concrete and the kisses are placed with love" just a reassurance for the one I love "even in my obituary the language will inevitably smooth over the kinks that kept the man in stitches" maybe by writing my own biography, i will have the last laugh, by making the fiction and the myth into what is remebered, rather than what is forgotten Steven |
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