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JingleBear
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0 posted 2003-06-01 11:26 PM


Watching them burn in the flame,
while I behold the water hose,
forced to set it down,
fearing myself be set a flame.

Watching them burn so freely,
my insides only heat up.
The key to survival screamed while in my hands,
yet when I let it loose,
it cried to be held.

Watching them transform to dust,
I now know my choice was incorrect,
for that hose will later let me loose
and watch as I cry.


--tell me what you think, and if you understand it. If anyone needs explaining, i'll be more than happy.

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1 posted 2003-06-01 11:30 PM


is it about doing nothing? and then karma? that sort of thing?
the_loner_23
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2 posted 2003-06-01 11:30 PM


I think it is a cool poem. But I couldn't catch the drift of it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

JingleBear
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3 posted 2003-06-01 11:32 PM


It's about a person watching two others quarrel, and forced to stay quiet, yet she knows exactly what to say to end the fight. Remaining silent, she realizes was wrong, and that she should have spoken her mind
apoetdreams
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4 posted 2003-06-01 11:33 PM


I believe I understant this. But it could be metaphor. Is this someone living with survivors guilt and all the pain involved with wittnessing such death? Or am I far to literal?? In any case, the poem seems to speak so clearly of pain. The metaphor is so good..that it may not be a metaphor. Either way, wonderful. I would like to know what inspired this poem!


Make your words as sweet as honey, someday you may have to eat them.

[This message has been edited by apoetdreams (06-01-2003 11:33 PM).]

the_loner_23
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5 posted 2003-06-01 11:34 PM


Thanks for telling me what it meant. My mind is so simple. I hate that.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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6 posted 2003-06-01 11:34 PM


got it now, makes sense thanks
apoetdreams
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7 posted 2003-06-01 11:35 PM


HA..see....I AM far too literal! Great poem. Glad it was symbolic too!

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8 posted 2003-06-01 11:52 PM


I'm glad you explained that
Makes for a very interesting write!

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