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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-06-01 06:01 PM



Tranquility, love’s common thread
Held by supple hands,
As Sapphirus fills her heart
for wicked impulse, or an impure thought
are quelled at such stone’s mercy,
As life from skies in rest, impart, for

Upon her breast,

Bluest sapphire, gem upon ivory skin
Held by thin and supple
Silver chain
Fast upon such thread of love
Her heart beats tame,
For  intelligence, wisdom, prophecy,
Faith and hope
She would claim

Darkest blue in sapphire eyes
That only he might tame

No argument in life, you see, when held by pure blue flame.


[A thanks to Dark Angel {Maree} for giving me a word to work with...her favorite, Sapphire.}

© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2003-06-01 06:06 PM


Karilea...my birthstone, made even more beautiful now, with your words.
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2 posted 2003-06-01 06:11 PM


Darkest blue in sapphire eyes
That only he might tame

loved the ending,,

It's the quality of the complement that i feel, not the quanity.

Sunshine
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And now, I know....

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4 posted 2003-06-01 06:24 PM


Enjoyed the thoughts...James
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5 posted 2003-06-01 06:40 PM





A real gem of a poem, as true as the sapphire's radiance is blue...

Very nice Karilea!


Richy


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6 posted 2003-06-01 08:38 PM


Darkest blue in sapphire eyes
That only he might tame

No argument in life, you see, when held by pure blue flame.

========================

a Vignette? perhaps...
more like a moth anthem
Definately a keeper.

Im still imagining your voice ...
can see the sparkle in your eyes.
I cant explain your power over me
Its understated understood & beautiful.
cj

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7 posted 2003-06-01 09:33 PM


Beautiful!!

believe in what your heart feels...

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8 posted 2003-06-01 10:17 PM


Fantastic Karilea!
I love this one as much as the others.
They are all keepers for my library.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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9 posted 2003-06-01 11:56 PM


Karilea,
==========================
Bluest sapphire, gem upon ivory skin
Held by thin and supple
Silver chain
Fast upon such thread of love
Her heart beats tame,
For  intelligence, wisdom, prophecy,
Faith and hope
She would claim
==========================
Awe you know how to paint a picture and touch a daddy's heart...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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10 posted 2003-06-02 12:06 PM


Darkest blue in sapphire eyes
That only he might tame

No argument in life, you see, when held by pure blue flame.



So beautiful is a sapphire and so beautiful
is your poem.....

Hugs  
Ethel

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11 posted 2003-06-02 12:09 PM


YES!

loving this......

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12 posted 2003-06-02 01:43 AM



Ah yes this was the image I got!

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-06-02 03:58 AM


There's no doubt about you sunshinygirl, from a word I chose you give us a romantic scene a beautiful picture. Thank you.

The Oxford Dictionary..

Vignette: A short description; a character sketch like a photograph.


Yup...Perfect!

oh and I'm keeping this Gem  

Maree.

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (06-02-2003 03:59 AM).]

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14 posted 2003-06-04 09:52 PM


Thanks again, Karilea. I'm keeping this to study. It's so beautiful.

And, Maree...thanks for the definition.  

Hugs  
Ethel

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15 posted 2003-06-05 04:42 AM


yes, beautiful
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16 posted 2003-06-05 09:09 AM


K-

This is so lovely.  I particularly love those last two lines.  

Darkest blue in sapphire eyes
That only he might tame


Patricia

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17 posted 2003-06-05 10:16 AM


More a sketch fleshed out I think....Lovely!
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