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LastMoments
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 92

0 posted 2003-05-31 11:02 PM

You took my arm
Engraved it deep
You left the mark
The bitter trail
The shiny metal in my skin
The suttle cry
You make this in me
You make this nothing

I found the pedal
Of the rose
The one I gave you last
I saw the shred
The final piece
That time should cover as
I felt the loss
The last time
That I will let surpass
I felt you

I lingered in the hallway
To let the shadows play
I crumbled in the dirt
So I could hide away
I enclosed my eyes
So I couldn't see
I ripped out my heart
So love could never be

Nothing to grasp
Nothing to lose
Just the constant memory
Of what I had with you

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-05-31 11:03 PM

This is so sad. But it was a wonderful poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2003-05-31 11:05 PM

"Nothing to grasp
Nothing to lose
Just the constant memory
Of what I had with you"

.....wow....this touches...
I love this!! and it goes to my library...

LastMoments
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 92

3 posted 2003-06-01 09:27 AM

Thank you, this pretty much is a reflection to the feelings long ago, of a relationship that could never work out. I think this kind of relates to anyone, the reason i wrote it was because everyone could share an opinion on it. Everyone could get a sense of its feeling. Thanks for your comments

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

4 posted 2003-06-01 11:42 AM

Very good piece of writing.

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2003-06-01 06:12 PM

Nice writing with feelings...James

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-06-01 06:22 PM

Nothing to grasp
Nothing to lose
Just the constant memory
Of what I had with you

Memories are everything sometimes,
aren't they?
This was sad, yet beautiful.
Hugs

Ethel

LastMoments
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 92

7 posted 2003-06-02 06:07 PM

Your encouragement is what tells me to keep trying to write, thank you

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