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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
I’ve never been to the ocean But I know how I should feel I’m supposed to be soothed Calmed by the rocking waves Tasting the allegedly salty air And be annoyed by the seargulls Whatever they are like I’ve never been in love But I know how I should feel I’m supposed to be happy Swept up by my lover’s arms Anticipating sweet promises And flattered by stolen kisses Whatever they are like But maybe my ocean feelings Wouldn’t be like any poem or picture Because no one has ever been me by the ocean Maybe my love would be special Because no one has ever been me in love Maybe my ocean feelings would rock humanity’s perception Of emotion And maybe my love would change the world |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
maybe....  this is excellent |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! fascinating write |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is an excellent poem like the others said. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This is a very nice write. You have done a good job of putting the maybes out there. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. Marilyn. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, you certainly loaded this one with philosophical thoughts. I like the way you did it. How WILL we react to things we've never done or emotions we've never experienced? Yes, we have people who say "You're gonna love this!!" and can even have the audacity to insinuate that if you don't there must be something wrong with you. LOL! As they say in Spanish, "que cojones!". You show a lot of insight here by realizing that you can't know the feeling of the unknown before you experience it and that it may be much less than you expected or even much more. The poem is honest in its presentation and realistic in it's conclusions...and the fact that you allow for the possibility of rapture makes it a positive and optimistic statement. I like it.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But maybe my ocean feelings Wouldn’t be like any poem or picture Because no one has ever been me by the ocean Maybe my love would be special Because no one has ever been me in love Maybe my ocean feelings would rock humanity’s perception Of emotion And maybe my love would change the world ================================ I LOVE this poem and the perspective you wrote it from. I had to wait 44 years to see the ocean..its the most amazing experience..it does change you..it becomes part of you. Very cool write E_A Im still imagining your voice ... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
quote: I think by how brilliantly philosophical this poem was that you already know the answers to those questions and when you experience it your feelings and love might indeed change the perception of some or many. Well done indeed. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quite an interesting read. We can read how it's supposed to be, but until we experience it, no one will ever be able to fully convey our internal reactions to us... some are going to feel some fear, some, perhaps, the wet of tear, some would definitely pooh the notion of surf and love, fulfilling an ocean...  I love it when a poet inspires another...thank you. |
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Poe_Pot_Pie Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 107Canada |
Being new here, perhaps you haven't taken the time to read our guidelines. Constructive criticism is fine as long as the people specify that they are open to critiques. Unkind or sarcastic remarks with no constructive value are never welcome - or acceptable. Please remember this as you participate in our site.... [This message has been edited by Balladeer (06-01-2003 07:09 PM).] |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
thank you all for commenting. Especially the nice people   |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Perhaps a trip to the ocean...who knows you might meet your love there...James |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
eminor_angel - and perhaps your feelings could change the world. Great write... BC |
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