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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-05-31 01:00 AM



turn me around
        and I am Adam
take my hat
        and I am naked in the sun
let me into the
                 garden
I want to see where the eyes
    can
        play and run

follow the talk
       it is enormous
smoky sound and a din
        to swallow down
the juice was robotic-numb
       find a leaf
to confuse the moral ground

see the black suits laughing
     green is bound
in a gold hand
            blurring eyes
I sip at nectar fruit
       watch the trees
sway in bass-drum
         serpent guise

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QjQ
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1 posted 2003-05-31 01:07 AM


nice write  i enjoyed reading

It's the quality of the complement that i feel, not the quanity.

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-05-31 02:57 AM


always fascinated by your works
Sunshine
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3 posted 2003-05-31 09:14 AM



Ah...your mind traveled far from the din
and suits...but you still found time
to share it with us...

thank you, Brian!

garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-05-31 09:18 AM


Now, this was different, but I
sure did like it. Very good
writing, Brian.  
hugs,
Ethel

ethome
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5 posted 2003-05-31 09:48 AM


Very interesting write from the beginning onward and a nice take on it I must say.
serenity blaze
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6 posted 2003-05-31 05:08 PM


oh my mad, mad, viking.

You DO worship like no other.

(wicked eyebrows)

mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

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7 posted 2003-05-31 10:25 PM


enjoyed watching you sway in disguise

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