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You Leave Me No Choice
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You Leave Me No Choice |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
You Leave Me No Choice By: Noah Eaton 5/29/03 Seems even on a Friday evening we're never eye to eye Failed to notice your pupil steering left when it should be turning right The needle jumps and the clocks are running twenty seconds late The way your eyelashes invaricate and your straight face objurgates But I'm not going to fall to this old bag of tricks Stay a while and see and see the hairshirt wearing thin Even when you're not wearing corduroy, I can still hear the warning 'Cause you leave no choice in the matter You leave me no choice in the matter... I find it hard not to put all the blame on you Nothing seems to change even when you're always on the move For every precipice you encounter you always have a parachute You hide the truth behind your thick opaque jumpsuit Is it really worth trying to appear like amethyst? With all the blood you shed for diamonds, the luster will only persist Until your crystal begins to dust on that bookshelf 'Cause you leave me no choice in the matter... You leave me no choice in the matter... Now I realize we all happen to make mistakes But if no one is disqualified, no one is safe So I have a fatal decision I must make... You're a vampire that I dare not try to fight Even when I can tell you're beginning to go blind And I can forgive, I can forget, but I'm not asking for a compromise... You send me down the chutes when I wish to climb the ladders... ......So you leave me no choice in the matter You leave me no choice in the matter You leave me no choice in the matter You leave me no choice in the matter You leave me no choice in the matter... . . . . . . . . . . (creak) . . . . . . . . . (slam) . . . . . . . . (lock) . . . . . . Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story ***Shakira*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-29-2003 11:58 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - another one from a very talented writer... BC |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Noah, your style is one of a kind. A nice blend of compassion, intellect, fervor, awareness, and consciousness, just to name a few. Always a celebration of artfulness, as well as a delightful learning experience... A real pleasure, as always Noah! Richy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 very sad and powerful[This message has been edited by passing shadows (05-30-2003 03:02 AM).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Noah  it's been too long....and this rocks my friend, truly rocks! |
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JilGirl Member
since 2003-05-24
Posts 364Washington |
You've painted a picture and stirred the senses to easily understand your words and rhyme. Much talent here! Blessings! Shirl Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Excellent write dear Noah. Sights and sounds, and touching words. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The way your eyelashes invaricate and your straight face objurgates =============================== Is it really worth trying to appear like amethyst? With all the blood you shed for diamonds, the luster will only persist ============================== Noah..I am digging your vocab and your syncopated internal rhymes... very cool write groovy poet dude  Well done Noah...write on...rock on. Im still imagining your voice ... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I find myself lost in the intricate of your weaves...understanding and mystified. TD |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
Noah........I felt just this way today....and it scared the hell out of me. And then I read this!!!!!!!! And I hope this feeling goes away soon. The visuals this brought back to the fore were incredible. Intensely sad and powerful write my dear friend. Much love and many belssings always Eno |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Noah, very deep and interesting write. Be well my friend. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey Noah, always a touching experience to read your poems. This is amazing. Sandra |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now I realize we all happen to make mistakes But if no one is disqualified, no one is safe So I have a fatal decision I must make... You're a vampire that I dare not try to fight Even when I can tell you're beginning to go blind And I can forgive, I can forget, but I'm not asking for a compromise... You send me down the chutes when I wish to climb the ladders... ......So you leave me no choice in the matter You tell em, Noah, my friend. This is a powerful write, Noah. Very powerful, with a real punch to it!! Stay well, my friend.  Hugs to you,  Ethel |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It's easy for that talented Janet to use syncopated words....He he......This is beautiful work Noah! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well, I have to echo Janet Marie, Noah ... I love the language you've used in this piece. Very well composed, and I love your visual reference to shutes and ladders. A very powerful read, my friend ... much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I know this...and although I have desired an alternative to the end, there comes time of impasse...thus the door slams and the key turns to lock away the memory. Loved this! You speak truth. Patricia |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sounds like the choices that come after the accumulation of layer upon layer of pain and frustration and disappointment...James |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Noah...A sad song of dissappointment, bitter tears. Written as only your talented pen could dare to write. My wish for you...much bluer skies. ***Ivy Rose |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is a sad but awesome write Noah Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Enjoyed this Noah JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Noah How do you do it? Your words were amazing and so very powerful were the images. I hope all is well with you. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
I never realized that heartbreak could be so beautiful. I must have more of this paradoxial feeling. Your words send me into a trance and I feel myself slowly falling in love with your words and the beauty they emit (no matter what the circumstance). Again, thank you for the beauty you have shed on this cynical world I live in. New Member, yv [This message has been edited by yv (06-03-2003 10:45 AM).] |
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LastMoments Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92 |
This made me piss my pants |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
Woah...just woah. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I'm keeping this one, Noah. I enjoyed everything about it.... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent work Noah! Just excellent! Just had to bump this again!! [This message has been edited by ethome (06-04-2003 03:47 AM).] |
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