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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-05-29 01:59 PM



Presence

He
Out doing what he does
Thinking slipsiding thoughts
Of her,
Feeling
Full

She
Inside doing what she does
Upsidedown thoughts reveling
In him,
Feeling
Full

Presents


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (05-29-2003 03:17 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-05-29 02:19 PM


Gosh how you make me smile!!
What wonderful images this brought to mind.
~Loving hugs, Nancy~

*thank you*

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

QjQ
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2 posted 2003-05-29 02:36 PM


very, very nice!!  

gMt

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3 posted 2003-05-29 02:54 PM


nice format...

M

Dark Angel
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4 posted 2003-05-29 05:03 PM


Sigh Karilea, this is a beautiful Vignette of him and her of love.

going to find number 2

Maree.

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5 posted 2003-05-29 05:18 PM


I've come back to add this to my library

M.

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6 posted 2003-05-29 05:21 PM


Karilea
I really wish I knew what they are. I do know that the writing is lovely.

Not another form of something you put on a salad is it? Something that makes your mind write interesting differently languaged things?!?!?

The best teachers have the biggest ears

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7 posted 2003-05-29 05:56 PM


and of course,  my mind fell in and out of
the gutter about four or five times...
Sheesh!

Nice!

JilGirl
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8 posted 2003-05-29 05:56 PM


You handled this exceptionally well!

Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands.

Martie
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9 posted 2003-05-29 06:37 PM


Karilea!!  This I like!  Sometimes you just capture it!
garysgirl
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10 posted 2003-05-29 07:48 PM


LOL  (giggle...giggle)  Me laughing at Ethome and Barry's reply.

Well, my friend, I don't know what this form is, either, but it sure is pretty. What is it? Is it syllable count or what?
Whatever, I sure do like it.  
Hugs,
Ethel

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11 posted 2003-05-29 08:09 PM


such creativity  



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12 posted 2003-05-30 04:20 AM


neat
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