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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Soon, propitiously It will fade into not quite Real or remembered. My eyes won't see Your hair tousled by wind Inviting my touch. And arms won't reach To fold around you Directing their own destiny. I won't breathe you Into my being - Breath will simply be for air. These lips will forget The feel of gasp And legs will stop trembling. This curl of need Rising from my depths Will surely subside. I'll let go these memories Inevitably, certainly Within the next century. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
It appears those wonderful memories will be retained, if not clearly in your mind, they may forever be imprinted clearly on a cellular memory level. Silky smooth remembrances worth remembering.  May you be making new wonderful memories... Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
May this wonderful NOW always be available .... in memory, eternally imprinted. Well, a century is a century .... but eternity is a MUST for the imprinting you speak so charmingly of! Love, Margherita  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
legs will stop trembling...do they ever? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ Sounds like foreverly to me~  Beautimous inking~ Love you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Suthern, this is very well done! Bravo! Cor |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yep, sweet Suthern Lady... I caught this last part.  I'll let go these memories Inevitably, certainly Within the next century. But, the good pnes like this need to be kept and cherished...especially the ones that make out legs tremble....  A very good write, dear friend Hugs, Ethel Psssstttt...it was good to see you here...  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh yes, imprinted for sure...on the mind of the reader and the heart of the lover. Outstanding read. TD |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have a hunch you didn't write this on 12/31/00...  Some things could take that long...  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well.........rofg.....if you need something to look forward to, you can take my word on it...those feelings do go away eventually...and when they do, they go far away...far far....*shakes her head* wonderful write lady...captures the power of the emotion perfectly |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Laura, this is the sweetest and most intensely moving poem I've seen from your pen. You've been shy about doing free verse, but you obviously have a talent for it. I hope you do more, just like this. ....say hi to Ruth....I look forward to her rhymed verse too... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah yes, very well written and easily related to......A most enjoyable read! Memories who can lose them? The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My eyes won't see Your hair tousled by wind Inviting my touch. And arms won't reach To fold around you Directing their own destiny. I won't breathe you Into my being - Breath will simply be for air. These lips will forget The feel of gasp And legs will stop trembling. This curl of need Rising from my depths Will surely subside. =========================== so when ya gonna teach a moth how to not feel the need? me thinks I was absent on the day they taught that heart lesson. powerful angsty write Ruth...I was so into the emotions of your words that I didnt realize they werent written in your usual gifted rhymes... trust me...free verse looks real good on your pen  very well done poetess suthern. Darkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Suthern, what a wonderful ending to a lovely poem... I love those surprise endings! Great Write! Richy |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
EA: I think that’s a pretty safe bet. *G* Thank you so very much! *S* Margherita: I thought about using eternity... but then I figured that with the longevity in my family, I just might live a century. *S* Thank you! *S* ps: I think the answer for some of them is... nope. *G* Thanks for reading! *S* Marge: Yes ma’am. *G* I thank you... love you, too! *S* Corinne: Thank you very much... I’m glad you liked. *S* garysgirl: Thank you so much, dear lady... and it’s good to be here! *S* ThisDiamond: You’ve just made my day... thank you so much! *S* Sunshine: LOL It came to life as I was riding the bus to work yesterday! *G* jellybeans: I do need something to look forward to... but I was kind of hoping to make those memories reality instead??? LOL A gal can hope, right? *G* Thank you so much! *S* Ratleader: Brat. LOL But how can I scold when you include such marvelous compliments? *S* Thank you very much... for such a kind response and for the nagging to get it posted. *G* But you never did tell me how much you paid these good people for all their wonderful replies! LOL ethome: Sometimes they’re all one has. *S* I thank you very much! *S* vandana: Thank you... I’m glad! *S* JM: That century isn’t up yet... but I’ll email you when I know.! LOL Thank you so very much, kind lady. *S* Richy: I’m glad you liked... and I thank you so much! *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ahem....they paid me for the privilege.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A very fine poem, enjoyed reading it. JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
HAH!! Not likely... If somehow you fall in an ice chasm and are frozen for three hundred years at which point someone finds you and the futuristic medical science thaws you out and returns you to life, your first words will be, "Where's Toe?" ....and you KNOW it!!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Balladeer made me laugh, your words made me smile...a beautiful write. M |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Suthern, you will have many more special memories ahead of you, sweet friend, there are brick walls along the way but you will find clear sailing from here and have much you don't have to regret writing in stone deep down! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A memory worth making is a memory worth saving, m'friend - Nicely said... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I won't breathe you Into my being - Breath will simply be for air.' LOL @ Balladeer... I have to agree, love the free verse from you suthern. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern Emotive and real...excellent free verse...how about some more! ? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: LOL... Howz about I go to the blackboard and scribble "Ratleader was right" 100 times? *G* But I'll have to add at least twice that many "thank you"s... for I truly do. *S* Jamie: Thank you very much. *S* Balladeer: ROFL... but, of course... after all, I'd think it was only tomorrow! LOL And tomorrow wouldn't be worth having without him. *G* nakdthoughts: Both laughs and smiles are good... glad you found them. *S* Thank you! M'toe: You're right. *S* As long as we're still kicking, we still have opportunities to add more memories... some may be even more special. *S* Thank you! PS: Thank you ma'am! *S* Nan: Absolutely! *S* Thank you very much! Duncan: ROFL - So much for that pensive mood, right? LOL Thank you very much... glad you like! *S* Martie: Not you, too! LOL I'm bone lazy yanno. LOL Thank you so much... such praise from a master poet is encouraging and much appreciated. *S* |
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