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You Can Take Anything You Want From Me
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You Can Take Anything You Want From Me |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Your honesty was the take on the matter the things that strike of villainy remain a brief novella in your history the church got all of your mother's body and her money leaving you broke with nothing left but passion the passion you brought to me refined out of forgiveness the same passion you would share with me in a world of lost art the art of true passion distinguished from all reason making my mysterious search for wholesome love, complete........ the first time I looked at your glowing freckled face I thought the freckles would be rough to the touch but you were so fresh and farm girl beautiful that I just had to try, had to somehow steal a stroke, a brush against your skin and when I finally did it was like touching the smooth open blossom of a lily and then our first kiss your lips were moist and full felt like they had been softened by a Godly sent sweet misty spring rain as you gave yourself to me without any apprehension My insides pushed my heart into my throat the magic that sometimes falls out of heaven captured us for the duration it was then I realized passion without love was against the rules of conscience oh how that kiss has never died now that same kiss speaks your mind with love and familiarity, reminds me of your simple brilliance, accompanied by your angel scent and the treasure of a thousand smiles you always give to me free I gently break away and I have to tell you everything is alright you can take anything you want from me. [This message has been edited by ethome (05-29-2003 05:50 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This? is just the sweetest: "the first time I looked at your glowing freckled face I thought the freckles would be rough to the touch but you were so fresh and farm girl beautiful that I just had to try, had to somehow steal a stroke, a brush against your skin and when I finally did it was like touching the smooth open blossom of a lily" and after that? the rest just falls like the dominoe... sweet, sweet smooth and lovely here! That is just generously gorgeous. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"oh how that kiss has never died now that same kiss speaks your mind with love and familiarity, reminds me of your simple brilliance, accompanied by your angel scent and the treasure of a thousand smiles you always give to me free I gently break away and I have to tell you everything is alright you can take anything you want from me." What excellently written images, ethome...your depiction of the scene is brilliant! great write... sp  just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and when I finally did it was like touching the smooth open blossom of a lily and then our first kiss your lips were moist and full felt like they had been softened by a Godly sent sweet misty spring rain as you gave yourself to me without any apprehension My insides pushed my heart into my throat the magic that sometimes falls out of heaven captured us for the duration it was then I realized passion without love was against the rules of conscience oh how that kiss has never died now that same kiss speaks your mind with love and familiarity, reminds me of your simple brilliance, accompanied by your angel scent and the treasure of a thousand smiles you always give to me free I gently break away and I have to tell you everything is alright you can take anything you want from me. ======================================== my goodness Eric...this is beyond lovely..the adoration and unadulterated love just lifts off the page in this write of heart and spirit. How wonderful to be inspired at this level. Beautiful heartfelt poetry my dear poet pal. And oh how I've missed you round here.   Darkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Celeste for the wonderful expression. I appreciate the read and the response. Snowpants Good to hear from you and I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece. Janet My poet pet. How are you anyway...Good I hope. Thanks for feeling the inspiration and for the warm kind comments that I've become accustomed to reading at your hand. I really enjoyed your latest repost it's a classic and as always I'll be looking for your next. Love to ya Eric The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"oh how that kiss has never died now that same kiss speaks your mind with love and familiarity, reminds me of your simple brilliance, accompanied by your angel scent and the treasure of a thousand smiles you always give to me free I gently break away and I have to tell you everything is alright you can take anything you want from me." Eric, this is just so beautiful! It's one huge sigh waiting to happen.. Love this keeper for my library. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I had to read your lovely poem once more, not because I did not understand it, but because I understood it so well--and I was deeply touched by the beauty of your words--and your soul.  Love & Eternal Light, Linda |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Nancy I'm so happy to make you want to sigh....I appreciate the response and the comments. Linda if I deeply touched you then I am happy to share that spirit and wish you the best. James thanks for reading as always I appreciate your comments. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If Spring wasn't in the air before... it is now! |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
this is beyond words, its just taken my breath away. what a lovely write. hugs from june x |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Eric, this is sooo beautiful. the first time I looked at your glowing freckled face I thought the freckles would be rough to the touch but you were so fresh and farm girl beautiful that I just had to try, had to somehow steal a stroke, a brush against your skin and when I finally did it was like touching the smooth open blossom of a lily and then our first kiss your lips were moist and full felt like they had been softened by a Godly sent sweet misty spring rain as you gave yourself to me without any apprehension My insides pushed my heart into my throat the magic that sometimes falls out of heaven captured us for the duration it was then I realized passion without love was against the rules of conscience And This ends it absolutely perfecctly... oh how that kiss has never died now that same kiss speaks your mind with love and familiarity, reminds me of your simple brilliance, accompanied by your angel scent and the treasure of a thousand smiles you always give to me free I gently break away and I have to tell you everything is alright you can take anything you want from me. Even if I wasn't a hopeless romantic, I would think this is one of the most beautiful love poems I have ever read. It makes me just want to say....Ohhhhhh!!!  Hugs to you,  Ethel |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Karilea Always good to send some spring your way. Fits in with your pen name....Sunshine.... Thanks. June...Thanks for the hugs I can always use them.....I appreciate your kind input on this piece. Ethel Thank you so much for those kind words and for being a hopeless romantic right along with me....I appreciate sharing the feelings.....Have a nice day Eric |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Eric, I am seldom speechless...but this... also left me breathless. TD |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric Such an honest feeling to this beautiful poem about love. It had me captured completely! |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
ethome,great poem it was good reading all the way to the end  Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Vandana always good to hear from you. Hey, ThisDiamond if I can leave you breathless and speechless what more can I ask of a love poem. I truly appreciate your kind words. Martie to capture you is a real pleasure....Thanks so much for reading and commenting. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Whoops, sorry Carol, I hit that button too soon....Thanks for the positive input and the response. |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
Hey Pops I'll take my turn on the puter and say I've never heard you talk like this....He he Mom would be elated....good stuff |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Breathtakingly lovely~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~  Tee-Hee ... loved CherryPopTart's reply~~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Marge. Don't pay any attention to that kid she's a mamma's girl. I appreciate the read and the response very much. The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is absolutely lovely... wonderful imagery and so much feeling... leaves me smiling. *S* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
suthern I appreciate the read and the response and I'm pleased that you're left smiling.....Have a good day Eric The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
E, you made my heart skip a beat (and not many can do that)and tears fill the eyes These are the kind of words that one wishes were meant for her. Just lovely M |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Maureen Glad you could drop in and read this and I'm glad it reached you. The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Whoops...replied to Maureen twice........damn buttons! [This message has been edited by ethome (05-31-2003 02:01 AM).] |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I'm stuck for something brilliant to say, I want to but I'm stuck... this is one of the most romantic poems I've ever ...ever... read in my life..major *SIGH* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Sea Thank you for the nice warm reply I apprecaite your kind words very much. I'm so glad this touched you. The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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