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Edder
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since 2003-04-02
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0 posted 2003-05-28 05:14 PM


Patience has never been one of my virtues, so this fits me to a T.  

Do tell! Do tell!
O wishing well!
What lies ahead for me?
My hopes I've sunk
with penny's dunk
into the depths of thee.
Why must I wait
while you debate
fulfilment of my dreams?
I think next time
I'll toss a dime
and wish for brevity!

[This message has been edited by Edder (05-28-2003 05:15 PM).]

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the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
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Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2003-05-28 05:16 PM


I hate waiting too. So this fits me too.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Temptress
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2 posted 2003-05-28 10:00 PM


I too impatient for waiting also.

enjoyed this much

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

Edder
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since 2003-04-02
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3 posted 2003-05-28 10:57 PM


loner_23- thanks for the read and the understanding.

Temptress- glad you enjoyed and thanks for your time.

KoKo
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Inside the shadow's shadow
4 posted 2003-05-29 02:06 AM


Edddddles! I liked the old version better. But this fits together more. Good work. The exclamation marks in the beginning kind of mess up the flow for me, but it's still softly sweet!!!! ~huggles~ I can't believe you told me to be honest. I always AM honest with you. Yes. I like your work that much. Silly man :Þ

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-05-29 02:26 AM


love this!
suthern
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6 posted 2003-05-30 02:35 PM


I can definitely relate! *G* All the pennies I've wished on thus far have only succeeded in depleting my wallet. *G* I enjoyed this!
passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-05-31 01:38 PM



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