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WhiteRose
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0 posted 2003-05-27 10:31 AM



I remember you writing
in the sand I recall
    cryptic etchings  
     cranial wretchings
I couldn't make sense
       of it all.

I spiraled, as we walked
             you talked
with the lopsidedness of one
who feels he's undone,
by mere surroundings,
       of towering gods.

What were the odds,
    that we would be
    together, whatever
attached by the  
        string of consciousness
prolapsed by the
          ring of senselessness
we're both falling,
      like waves upon shore
a landscape that is no more,
      for the tower's no longer alive.

WhiteRose 05/27/03


© Copyright 2003 Anne Thompson - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2003-05-27 10:42 AM


I've been missing you! If this poem is an indication of what has been transpiring in your life, I am sorry to hear it. A rose should be blushing with joy, not frowning in sadness.

I await the day, that you post a picture that reflects an inner peace and joy. It will happen, Dear Rose of White! The sun will shine down upon you again!

If I'm way off base with this reply, please accept my appologies. This is just how I am reading it.

Loving hugs,
Linda

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2 posted 2003-05-27 11:49 AM


What were the odds,
    that we would be
    together, whatever
attached by the  
        string of consciousness
prolapsed by the
          ring of senselessness
we're both falling,
      like waves upon shore
a landscape that is no more,
      for the tower's no longer alive.


Hello Anne  
I've missed you and your poetry and your sweet replies. I hope that you're back?

As always, this is a very beautiful poem, even though it is sad. I hope things are better now?

See you later, Lady  
Heart hugs  
Ethel

ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2003-05-27 02:38 PM


You have been missed my dear.
This write conveys the falling well, as always, expertly penned.  A deep descent, that hopefully lands in a meadow gold.
Hugs, TD

WhiteRose
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4 posted 2003-05-27 03:35 PM


Linda, thank you so much, dear lady, for your wonderful response. It's so nice to know that I've been missed. My intentions are always to post everyday. So much for good intentions. Life goes up, then comes down, and it seems I'm always landing flat on my face.

For now, life is good. The joy of the Lord is always there, but happiness, and serenity are fleeting.


WhiteRose
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5 posted 2003-05-27 03:36 PM


Hi Ethel

It's always nice to come back among friends. I've missed the smiling faces and the warm friendships. Thank you for being so kind, and always reading my slight attempt at poetry these days.

WhiteRose
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6 posted 2003-05-27 03:42 PM


TD, thank you for your kind response. I've been lurking, reading, and always attempting to find the time to post, or to reply, but it seems there just is never enough time.

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7 posted 2003-05-27 05:31 PM


Hey Where have you been Ms Rose? I've missed you. I love how each line of this poem just flows into one another beautifully. The sadness is beautifully expressed.



Maree

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8 posted 2003-05-27 06:42 PM


I spiraled, as we walked
             you talked
with the lopsidedness of one
who feels he's undone,
by mere surroundings,
       of towering gods.

This is awesome writing. Like the others, I too have missed your poetry. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

WhiteRose
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9 posted 2003-05-27 07:13 PM


Hello Maree, I've been around. Just quietly reading, and keeping to myself. Sometimes it's necessary. I'm not even sure why...
WhiteRose
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10 posted 2003-05-27 07:15 PM


Chris, thank you for your kind words. Life happens, and we just go along. I'm still singing my song, I'm just singing it on the inside more now. I've missed this place...

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (05-27-2003 07:15 PM).]

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11 posted 2003-05-27 07:47 PM


WhiteRose~
It's nice to read you~
This is a lovely piece~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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JamesMichael
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12 posted 2003-05-27 08:51 PM


This brought back a beautiful memory to me of many years ago when me and my girlfriend Nancy were walking on the beach and we noticed a large round object about five foot high floating towards the shore...it was a large metal float...we rolled it onto the sand and we wrote love letters all over it where the sand stuck to the float...James
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13 posted 2003-05-27 09:29 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Anne, I'm glad to see you have returned, and I'm so sorry if tis ramble is relating to your own personal happenings, as we are all here to offer our hugs to you! (sad sigh) Keep etching in the sand for the calling will be done, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Anne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Martie
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14 posted 2003-05-27 09:41 PM


It is good to see you, WhiteRose!  The imagery in this of the sand and towers, makes me think of something fleeting, that is built to stand tall, but built of material that will be taken back out to sea.  A lovely expression!  
QjQ
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15 posted 2003-05-27 09:47 PM


very loving thoughts!! heres a short one i posted. /pip/Forum79/HTML/002077.html

QjQ

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16 posted 2003-05-28 03:10 AM


I was beginning to wonder if you'd vanished...glad to see you here again, I thought I was gonna hafta make a road trip up there to make sure you were okay.
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