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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-05-26 04:51 PM


I felt the dust
cling to my chest
from a day of sweat and ale
I blew upward
lower-lipped
to brush the hair from covered eye
as I bent
I saw you look
searching for the down of me
and a steady blush was born
slow at first
then
harder yet
as you laughed at me outloud
loving my un-ease.

Whiskered stubble on the chin
and hands that knew the worth
of a mug of ale and shots
blue eyes yellowed by the past
I swallowed, when I smelled your musk
eager for your word.

I brought to you a tankard full
and danced there silently
beneath your eyes appraising me
joyous in debauchery
as you winked at me.

Tell me stories, will you sir?
Later?
Draw your maps on me.
I will sing for you--I shall--
squeeze the tune
from the bagpipe.

I will lick the salt of sea
and hoist the sail for distance lands
promised in your eye.

Sing me songs of poetry.
I shall dance for you.

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Magnus
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1 posted 2003-05-26 04:56 PM


Karen,  a very nice inspire....Shiver me
timbers,  hoist the jib and sail the briney
deep!!!

Dark Angel
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2 posted 2003-05-26 04:59 PM


I see how you were inspired m'friend. A lovely write.

Maree

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3 posted 2003-05-26 05:01 PM


gee if i had a sailing ship i would set my sails and let the winds blow me straight to you,  terrific write,  

but remember promises,promises

QjQ

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4 posted 2003-05-26 05:11 PM


Wonderful Karen...
So very very much enjoyed the read this afternoon.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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5 posted 2003-05-26 06:11 PM


Woah, Karen

Excellent job, I really really enjoyed this one

Patricia
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6 posted 2003-05-26 07:00 PM


Ahh.. Somebody point me to the nearest pub.  I think I could do well with a cup of Irish coffee.

This is fantastic...I read it 3 or 4 times.  I let the whole thing unfold... each time it got better and better, which I didn't think could be possible.  I think I shall go back for another shot of this one.

Loved it (can you tell?)  
Patricia

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7 posted 2003-05-26 08:28 PM


I liked it.

Never be normal!

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8 posted 2003-05-26 08:33 PM


You two truly make magic together..nuff said
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9 posted 2003-05-26 08:37 PM






(sigh) I better stay out of those saloons but I could do with some shamrock juice! (big hugggsssssss) Of course you can hear those promises across the emerald miles too, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2003-05-26 08:53 PM


serenity,
Wearing symbols as your shoses
You walk the quicksand of your blues
Dance upon the fires burn
Cool the heat that is your yearn.
But fantasy of cooling rhyme
Will only last a moments time.
The antidote is not in rue
But in the ancorage of true.



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11 posted 2003-05-26 10:18 PM


I like! I like!

Draw maps on you? The mind boggles...

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12 posted 2003-05-27 03:26 AM


very cool! very cool write!
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13 posted 2003-05-27 07:00 AM


this was wonderful!  I also had fun playing this out in my head!  Perfection!

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

serenity blaze
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14 posted 2003-05-27 09:54 PM


thanks all for reading. (pressed for time right now, but I'll be back to return the favor soon. Hugs to all!)
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