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Rick
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0 posted 2003-05-28 09:20 AM



I’d rather die this moment than to say this last goodbye
I’d rather hide my feelings than for you to see me cry
I’d rather give you truth than lies and hold you by my hand
I’d rather you just listen now and try to understand

Why the years have changed us and why our love has died?
Why the feel of sadness now and why the tears we’ve cried?
Why the day of habit and why the call of change?
Why the courage to now speak and why I feel so strange?

We’ve grown together from our youth, then slowly grew apart
We’ve given much but never saved the love within our heart
We’ve tried, I’m sure, but not enough, to mend what time did break
We’ve given all our happiness, but now there’s none to make

Time has taken victims, but here I still do try
Time and fate write future from beginnings to goodbye
Time to say I’m sorry that our time has lost its love
Time to make you listen to my prayers to God above


Life is but a footstep to the truth that waits in store
Life, our time of trying, of relationships and more
Life, where every moment is a struggle with our heart
Life, where we all battle and from where we all depart

© Copyright 2003 Rick Van Weenen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-05-28 10:03 AM


We’ve grown together from our youth, then slowly grew apart
We’ve given much but never saved the love within our heart
We’ve tried, I’m sure, but not enough, to mend what time did break
We’ve given all our happiness, but now there’s none to make

Rick, you have written what I have experienced, as I am sure others have as well. You did it with perfection! Going into my library this is. Excellent. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Patricia
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2 posted 2003-05-28 10:07 AM


Rick,

This is beautiful.  I feel your heart in every poem you write...God is foremost in your life. Let His steady and loving hand continue to guide you.  I have been there, my friend. Oh, I have been there! But I just call on Him...and he provides.

Looking forward to more of your words,
Patricia

Rick
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3 posted 2003-05-29 08:11 AM


Chris, thank you for this reply, the heart just keeps speaking, so on I do write, filled with expectations, to just cry upon a page, but it makes me feel better.
Your comments are very much heart felt and appreciated.

Patricia, thank you for this reply, nice to have my friends always there to share part of themselves with me, life goes on and I keep smiling through the love of my poetry.
Thank you for keeping on reading and replying, it is very much appreciated.

To you both, again thank you very much for your replies.

Sincerely
Rick

Ariana
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4 posted 2003-05-30 03:32 PM


Rick
You have written many words of wisdom that may not have an answer.  And, might I add, very well done.  I think that a few of us have been there and can relate to how you feeel.

                 Ariana


QjQ
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5 posted 2003-05-30 03:38 PM


Fabulous write rick!!!

gMt

Richy
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6 posted 2003-05-30 04:24 PM



Rick my friend, sorry I have missed a few of your latest poems, but I have been busier then a one legged Irishman, at a Riverdance audition!

Lol

Whether or not these are words are in fact true for you. They are a very honest reality of many relationships. And it is especially hard, when you have been together for so many years. What can you say, people change. And many times, that change, widens an ever increasing gap between them. And all the nice thoughts, and prayers in the world sometimes, just can’t change the fact that your feelings for each other have changed as well.

Loving someone, and being in love with someone, are two different things. And just because you may no longer be in love with that person, it doesn’t mean that you still don’t love them very much, and have the strongest of feelings for them. And the last thing that you would ever want to do, is to hurt them in any way.

But how in the world, do you tell someone you’ve spent so many years with, that you feel it may be time, to go your separate ways? Some figure it out, and just do it. And others, just don’t, for a myriad of reasons.

Sometimes those who stayed, wish they hadn‘t?
And sometimes those who left, wish they hadn’t either?


These verses of yours, put it very nicely:


“We’ve grown together from our youth, then slowly grew apart
We’ve given much but never saved the love within our heart
We’ve tried, I’m sure, but not enough, to mend what time did break
We’ve given all our happiness, but now there’s none to make”

“I’d rather die this moment than to say this last goodbye
I’d rather hide my feelings than for you to see me cry
I’d rather give you truth than lies and hold you by my hand
I’d rather you just listen now and try to understand”


Again, very sad, but honest words Rick....


I hope life is treating you in a kind way

You have a relaxing weekend friend.


As always, a wonderful write!


Your pal,

Richy

[This message has been edited by Richy (05-31-2003 04:00 PM).]

ethome
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7 posted 2003-05-30 04:45 PM


This is really nicely done and right at heart level....Great phrasing!
passing shadows
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8 posted 2003-05-30 07:34 PM


yeah...I echo all above...and let me say I love this, as well as everything you write. Very inspiring!
ThisDiamond
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9 posted 2003-05-30 07:38 PM


A said truth, and you have expressed what many cannot...
Recalled, the cycle, even in this painful swirl, that from death comes new life...
Whatever the context.  All prayers. TD

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10 posted 2003-05-30 11:11 PM


Rick, this is so very true for so many, and you wrote it just as it is.
Hugs
Sandra

Rick
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11 posted 2003-05-31 09:16 AM


Ariana, thank you for your reply here, sometimes the wisdom get caught up in a wirlpool of thoughts, my heart just keeps penning away.

QjQ, thank you for your visit and comment, very much appreciated.

My dear pal Richy, again thank you for your reply, you are a man of much wisdom and worthy thoughts, I appeciate your time to respond and every word you have shared here.
Isn't it wonderful to have a head full of thoughts to share, see you soon.

ethome, thank you for this reply, it was heart felt and deeply appreciated.

Dear Dixie, hello again my friend, thank you for your reply, always very much appreciated and heart felt.

TD, thank you for this great reply, very, very much appreciated.

Dear Sandra, thank you for coming for the visit and giving your lovely reply, hugs back, take care.

To you all my friends, again thank you and take care.

Sincerely
Rick

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