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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
Constructive critism is greatly appreciated. Thanks. Cation Your heart is molten Like the quizzical core of Earth That your magnetism rivals (At least science can explain why you draw me) Your eyes are like quicksand Like suction to my mind I try to float and not struggle (Like they say in outdoor survival guides) Your thoughts are like a chocolate ocean Deep enough to drown in I almost did (But sanity’s lifeguard rescued me) Concisely, you’re captivating And even if I didn’t love you I would die still drifting around your soul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
neat write...what a love! |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Eminor_Angel, I liked this! And: "And even if I didn’t love you I would die still drifting around your soul" These two lines took my breath away. I shall let this play in my mind for a while, if you don't mind   Welcome to PIP!!!Mike |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Your eyes are like quicksand like suction to my mind." --fabulous line! I know whereof you speak! But thankfully, "sanity's lifeguard rescued me..."  Welcome to Passions! Warm, welcoming hugs, Earth Angel |
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