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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-05-24 04:11 AM


I have to wonder
how you knew
exactly what to say--
did it mean the same to you?
cause you same amount of pain?
I think of you,
wondering,
if you found your dream,
or is your pillow just like mine?
a silencer of scream?

Is your blood as blue as mine
safe behind the skin too thin?
Are your tears composed of fear--
solution nothing but saline?
Have you, did you, do you love?
Do you look back, regretting day?

You didn't need to shoot you know.
I was dying anyway.

Just another humbled keep--
a junkie shuffles on the street
wishing these were not my feet
and this path not mine.

I took a tourniquette and snapped
damned near broke syringe in half
and knowing now it's all a drug
I sweat beneath bequeath of "love"
demented now, I'm demonized
foaming mouth to taste the lies
chewing on my tongue for truth
questioning myself.

I think we are too much alike
for me to find some comfort there.
Needy things indulging greed--
apologies explode--exhale--
as I taste the chemical
wishing these were not my feet
chewing on my tongue again
looking back, regretting day,
loving now, the silent scream--

dying anyway.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-24-2003 05:23 AM).]

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-05-24 04:17 AM


ain't that the truth!
QjQ
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2 posted 2003-05-24 05:05 AM


gee i'm speechless on this write,

QjQ

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-05-24 07:17 AM


Karen, your writing makes the story seem so
real. It really is amazing how you do this.
Hugs,  
Ethel

Ceinwyn
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4 posted 2003-05-24 10:59 AM


shockingly wow..I dunno what to say...!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

quatro
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5 posted 2003-05-24 12:32 PM


Serenity,

You have such a serene way of writing and it amazes me everytime I read your work.  I may not always respsond, but you definately move me.

quatro

Aenimal
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6 posted 2003-05-24 01:35 PM


You're writing is a drug..This bleeds, into the chamber just before the thrust and released with a jolt to the brain..you write magnificiently and hope this is more fiction and metaphor than anything else and if it this doesn't make any sense don't mind me I'm in the grasp of something else..we'll talk hugs
Janet Marie
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7 posted 2003-05-24 02:03 PM


even when you bleed its poetically beautiful,
and you already know that there is MUCH I could say to this...but...........
*sigh* ... just remember baby..
karma ... sometimes guns backfire.

Darkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that.
Hate cannot drive out hate ... only love can do that.
MLK

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