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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2003-05-22 11:33 PM



I see you in gathering twilight
your back to the wind, your face aflame
with the fine burnished gold of the sun,
you are the glowing horizon.

I see you beside me in moonlight
you walk with the calm of the earth,
you fill me like slow rolling thunder
you are the goddess of love.

I see you in flickering candle light
dark eyes soft and smiling,
your scent and your heartbeat surround me;
were these memories all of life
they would be enough.


©2003 by icebox

© Copyright 2003 icebox - All Rights Reserved
QjQ
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1 posted 2003-05-22 11:40 PM


*your scent and your heartbeat surround me;


very nice lines to think about and a very nice write,,,

QjQ

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2003-05-22 11:42 PM




(smiles) I think there is no sin ever to being intoxicated in pure ecstacy, sweet friend, this made me smile and I wish for this love to always grace your world, yay! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a gem, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

BluesSerenade
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3 posted 2003-05-22 11:45 PM


There is a sense of magic in the little things that count.   I especially liked the sound of thunder...and how you captured the impending rainfall, immersed in feelings after the storm.  


icebox
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4 posted 2003-05-22 11:45 PM


QjQ ~

Mistletoe Angel ~

Thank you both for reading my poem.  I am glad you enjoyed it.  Thank you for your comments.

Saunni
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5 posted 2003-05-22 11:48 PM


Oh, this is breath taking. Truly is. Just beautiful.

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

icebox
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6 posted 2003-05-22 11:48 PM


BluesSerenade ~ Interesting, it was a moment after an emotional storm.  Thank you as always for your kindness and insight.
vlraynes
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7 posted 2003-05-22 11:50 PM



icebox...this is simply beautiful.
Wonderfully penned.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

icebox
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8 posted 2003-05-22 11:50 PM


Saunni ~ I am glad you enjoyed it.  Thank you for reading and for your comment.
icebox
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9 posted 2003-05-22 11:52 PM


vlraynes ~ Thank you for reading my poem.  I am glad you enjoyed it.
passing shadows
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10 posted 2003-05-23 04:26 AM


it is beautiful, yes
vandana
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11 posted 2003-05-23 10:06 AM


nice
Martie
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12 posted 2003-05-23 11:05 AM


icebox...you captured the imagery and emotion in just a few words of each scene...lovely!
Sunshine
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13 posted 2003-05-23 11:11 AM



Beautiful images, ice...I've seen just such,
and they are lovely, indeed...

Jason Lyle
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14 posted 2003-05-23 11:11 AM


Can't add much to these comments, I really enjoyed this, wonderful imagery, wonderful write.

Jason

SimplyGold
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15 posted 2003-05-23 11:15 AM


I concur with all the above.

Thanks for putting your pen to the paper.

SG

Fred Hobbs
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16 posted 2003-05-23 11:28 AM


Cool poem Ice.  Well written and entertaining.
teledon
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17 posted 2003-05-23 01:38 PM


I usually don't write "love poems",  but this poem of yours may have given me inspiration to do so . I enjoyed it very much.  

"keep it simple"

icebox
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18 posted 2003-05-23 02:51 PM


passing shadows ~ times of pain for me blend together; moments of beauty stand out in sharp relief.  I don't know if it is like that for others. Thank you for reading.

vandana ~ I am glad you liked this.  Thank you.

Martie ~ Thank you.  I appreciate your comment.

Sunshine ~ *smile* I am happy for you.  Thank you for reading.

Jason Lyle ~ Thank you for reading this.  I am glad you enjoyed it.

Simply Gold ~ Thank you.  You made me stop and think how long it has been since the last time I wrote on paper; I have to think about that some more.  I really like paper.

Fred Hobbs ~ I am glad you found it enjoyable.  Thank you for reading.

teledon ~ Like many poets, I have found that poetry is the floor on which I dump most of my pain.  It can also be a thing of joy.  Thank you for reading and for your comments.

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