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Sunkissed
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0 posted 2003-05-22 10:31 AM



Who's stronger?
you?
stand
just outside sunlight
where rays fail to reach
in hopes of thawing
denying yourself &
others so much warmth

Who's weaker?
I?
revealer of secrets
pounding upon sleeve
in hopes of recieving
yet never quite believing
standing still while
moving on

Who's stronger?
you?
set fire to page
igniting
yet as quick as
lightening
snuff flames
joke or game?

who's weaker?
I?
accept without
bet and pay my
debt of whatever
I may or may not
get...
it's all on me,
see...

Who wins?

Don't we both?


Sunkissed.

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2003-05-22 10:37 AM


Sunkissed.
Sounds right to me, enjoyed.

Sunkissed
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2 posted 2003-05-22 10:39 AM


Thank you Seymour for reading and commenting.

Sunkissed.

Sunshine
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3 posted 2003-05-22 10:44 AM


I got the image of a magnifying glass being held to tinder...

You do keep me intrigued with your writing...

keep it up!

Sunkissed
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4 posted 2003-05-22 11:03 AM


Thanks Sunshine!

always nice to see your insightful comment beneath my work!

Sunkissed.

Brad Majors
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5 posted 2003-05-22 11:56 AM


nice
Sunkissed
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6 posted 2003-05-22 04:09 PM


Thank you Brad.

Sunkissed.

ThisDiamond
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7 posted 2003-05-22 08:00 PM


I liked the way you wrote this one...good questions set in a portrait of deafening silence. TD
Saunni
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8 posted 2003-05-22 10:11 PM


What a great write! By the way, I love your name. It's cool!  

Sauni The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

[This message has been edited by Saunni (05-22-2003 10:11 PM).]

passing shadows
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9 posted 2003-05-23 04:56 AM


cool!
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