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KristieSue
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0 posted 2003-05-22 02:21 AM



I dream my life in muffled sob
swimming through a sea of tears
I blanket myself in my fears
but shiver still through the night

I find the hole within my head
and try to put things back in place

I am a traveller of self
but find myself lost in you
with pieces of me in your hand...

So take all of me or nothing
for there is no inbetween

I am thoughtless
laughing now
my life with you remains my dream
a dream I never want to wake

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Written by kristiesue and Serenity (thanks Karen)


Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS


[This message has been edited by KristieSue (05-22-2003 04:17 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-05-22 02:24 AM


Wonderful piece, I enjoyed it very much

Julie

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2 posted 2003-05-22 03:05 AM


This was fun...

thank you lady!

was my pleasure.

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3 posted 2003-05-22 03:49 AM


neat duet!
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4 posted 2003-05-22 04:15 AM


We will have to do this again soon!  I enjoyed my first duet!

huggles!

thanks guys!

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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5 posted 2003-05-22 05:27 PM


enjoyed this duet
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6 posted 2003-05-22 05:47 PM


KristieSue,

I dream my life in muffled sob
swimming through a sea of tears
I blanket myself in my fears
but shiver still through the night

I loved these lines, descriptive indeed and tells the tale of many who search for the better, yet entraped within themselves.

A wonderful post, thanks for sharing this.

Sincerely
Rick

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7 posted 2003-05-22 06:24 PM


I love that verse too, the one Rick selected. It's wonderful even standing alone.

Nice pairing


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8 posted 2003-05-23 12:10 PM


I find the hole within my head
and try to put things back in place

It's all so good, but those lines are so true!!!

Nice going you two~


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9 posted 2003-05-23 08:32 AM


awwww y'all...Thanks!  amazing how you can just start writing and the words flow out.

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